美丽的夕阳 beautiful sunset

350字
主题:观察、怀旧、诗意、宁静、成长、发现

美丽的夕阳 beautiful sunset

today, when i walked home after school, it was a little late, because i studied with my friends after school. i realized the cloud was like burning. the color was so red. the sun was very round and big. it went down the mountain slowly. i slowed down my pace and enjoyed the sunset. it made me think of my happy time when i stayed in my hometown. at that time, i could sit at my front yard and appreciated the sunset. it was the best moment for me. the nature is so beautiful. if we slow down our life pace, we can find the beauty of our life.

今天,因为放学后跟朋友一起学习了,所以回家的时候有点晚了。我发现天上的云就像在燃烧着一样,非常红。太阳又大又圆,慢慢地下山。我放慢脚步,享受着夕阳。这让我想起在家乡的美好时光。那个时候,我可以坐在我的前院欣赏日落,这对我来说是最美好的时刻。大自然是如此的美丽,如果我们放慢生活节奏,就可以发现生活的美。

精选读者点评

云像在烧,这个比喻真烫手!后文却没再碰它,可惜了这团火。

钱能给我们带来什么

250字
主题:价值观、善恶有报、物质与精神、人性考验

金钱在我们的生活中占有重要的地位。没有钱,我们无法办事,甚至不能生活下去。因此,有些人认为金钱就是一切。他们用钱可以买到所有他们想要的东西。有的人甚至通过偷、骗取金钱。当然,他们最终的结果就是受到惩罚。因此金钱不仅能给我们带来幸福,而且也能给我们带采不幸。

money is very important in our life. we can do nothing and can even live on without money. so some people think money is everything. with money, they can buy everything they want. someone even gets money by stealing and cheating. of course, they will get punished in the end. so money can bring us not only happiness, but misery also.

精选读者点评

钱真能买来幸福?你写到“偷、骗”,可没说那些被偷被骗的人心里多疼,下次试试写一个被偷走救命钱的老奶奶哦!

干净的水 the clean water

400字
主题:环境保护、家园变迁、生态觉醒、人与自然

干净的水 the clean water

when i was very small, i stayed in the hometown with my grandparents. i had the great time there, i liked the environment so much. there was a long river in front of my house, the water was very clean, i could see the small fish swim. my grandma usually washed her clothes along the river side. but now when i went back to my hometown, the river was very dirty, the water was light yellow and there were so many rubbish floating in the river. it made me feel that the river had lost its life. i missed the old time when i was playing in the river. it is human being that ruin the environment, if we don’t take action to protect it, we will destroy ourselves.

在我很小的时候,我和我的爷爷奶奶呆在家乡。我过的很愉快,我喜欢那里的环境。在我的房子前面有一条很长的河,水很干净,我可以看到小鱼游泳。我奶奶通常沿着河边洗她的衣服。但是现在当我回到家乡,河水很脏,水是淡_的,有很多垃圾漂浮在河里。我觉得这条河已经失去了它的生命。我想念在河里玩耍的旧时光。是人类破坏了环境,如果我们不采取行动来保护它,我们将毁灭自己。

精选读者点评

水清见鱼,奶奶洗衣的河岸多鲜活!后半段“淡黄”“失了生命”这几个词牵肠挂肚,你心里真装着那条河啊。

working for my mother

300字
主题:劳动体验、家庭支持、自我认知、责任意识

the summer vacation began. i decided to work to make money for the ne_t term. but i didn’t know what work i could do.

at that time, my mother was writing a book. i decided to type for her for pay. she agreed and paid me 5 yuan for 1000 words.

i began to work. i typed so slowly that i could type only several hundred words a day. it was a hard job for me. i kept typing all day long.

i finished the work two weeks later. i came to know how hard it was to make money.

暑假开始。我决定为下一个学期挣钱。但我不知道我能做什么。

那个时候,我妈妈在写一本书。我决定为她支付工资。她同意了,给我付了1000元钱5个字。

我开始工作。我打字很慢,我只能每天打几百个单词。对我来说这是一个艰难的工作。我一直在打字。

我完成了这项工作2周后。我来知道如何赚钱是多么困难。

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打字慢得像蜗牛爬,可硬是咬牙干完,这股子倔劲儿,比稿费金贵多了!

a poor kid-一个可怜的孩子

350字
主题:童年困境、家庭失温、生存尊严、边缘少年、无声呐喊

我陪妈妈在商场买东西的时候认识一个小孩。他正在商场附近的垃圾堆里捡垃圾,我们俩年龄相仿。他告诉我家里没人关心他。妈妈死了以后爸爸给他娶了一个后妈,后妈不喜欢他而且老打骂他。对他来说,家就像地狱一般。于是这个孩子开始逃学然后索性离家出走。他宁愿自由自在地与垃圾为伍。多可怜的孩子呀!

a poor kid

i knew a kid when i went shopping with my mother in a mall. he was picking something in the rubbish cans near the mall. he was nearly of the same age with me. he told me that no one care about him when he was at home. his mother died and his father remarried so he has a stepmother who disliked him and often beat him. to him, home was just like a hell.so he began to play truant and then at last he left his home. he preferred living freely wth rubbish. what a poor kid he is!

精选读者点评

蹲在垃圾堆边的样子,写得真让人心头一紧。后妈打骂那句,没加形容词,反而更扎人。客观来说“与垃圾为伍”太重了,他捡的是废品,不是垃圾,改个词,心就软一分。

我的星期天-during sundays

400字
主题:关爱他人、责任启蒙、自我成长、善意行动、教育平等、温暖陪伴

以前的星期天我基本都玩过去了,可是现在我的星期天变得有意义多了。事情是这样的:有一次老师带领我们去参观福利院,那里住的都是没有爸爸妈妈的孤儿。他们真可怜呀!有的儿童已经到了上学的年龄,可是他们仍没有背上书包。于是我想,我们家离福利院很近,我可以每个星期天去一次,然后把我上课学到的东西教给他们。这多有意义啊。当我把这个想法告诉老师时,她同意了。从那以后我就是那里的义务小老师了。

during sundays

i used to idle away my sundays. but now i have more meaningful thing to do. one day our teacher took us to visit the welfare house. there lived the orphans. some of them are of school age already. but they don have the chance to go to school yet. so why couldn i teach them what i had learnt in the classes on sundays? my home is close to the weffare house. wasn it a good idea?

when i told my teacher this, she looked at me with a yes on her face. from then on, i act as a little voluntary teacher there on sundays.

精选读者点评

这个“小老师”当得真踏实!福利院孩子没书包的细节放心不下,你写得也放心不下。后半段英文夹杂有点突兀,像突然换了个频道,下次试试全用中文讲完这个故事哦!

我的一天初中英语作文带翻译

300字
主题:校园生活、家庭时光、语言学习、成长记录

my name is anna.today is sunny. i get up at 6:00. then i eat breakfast and go to school. i have four subjects.one chinese classone math classone english class and one p.e.class.

at noon we have lunch at school. afternoon we have two math lessons and one music lesson. math is too difficult.then i go home and do my homework ne_t i have dinner with my parents and watch tv. i go to bed at nine o’clock.

我的名字是安娜。今天是阳光明媚的。我在6点起床。然后我吃早饭去上学。我有四个科目。中文课数学课英语课一个体育课。

中午我们在学校吃午饭。下午我们有两个数学课程和一个音乐的教训。数学太难了。然后我回家做作业然后我和我的父母一起吃晚饭看电视。我九点钟上床睡觉。

精选读者点评

哎哟,中英文混搭得挺有创意!略显“one chinese classone math class”中间少空格啦,读着像连体婴~还有“教训”是“课程”写串了吧?下次写完自己慢读一遍,耳朵会帮你揪错哦!

美丽人生

450字
主题:生命教育、心灵成长、积极心态、人际影响、存在意义

last night, i watched a movie, it is about two teenagers, they have cancer, but the boy is positive about life while the girl is negative about life. they meet each other, then the girl is affected by the boy, she starts to see the beautiful things in her life. i am so moved by the movie, though the ending of the movie is not so perfect, we see the change of the girl’s life. the topic of the movie is to tell people to be positive about life, no matter what happens, even the bad fortune they get, they still need to smile every day. people need to find the beauty of life, so they won’t life live without meaning.

昨晚,我看了一部电影,那是关于两个青少年,他们身患癌症,但是男孩对生活很乐观,然而女孩子却对生活很悲观。他们遇见了彼此,然后女孩受到了男孩子的影响,她开始看到了生活的美好食物。我被这部电影深深地感动,虽然电影的结局不是那么的完美,但是我们看到了女孩生活的改变。电影的主题是告诉人们要对生活乐观,无论发生什么事情,即使他们遇到不幸,仍然需要每天乐观面对生活。人们需要发现生活的美,这样他们就不会活得没有意义。

精选读者点评

开头英文段落里“beautiful things”写成“beautiful food”啦,后文中文却译作“美好事物”,前后不一致哦!再检查一遍中英文对应关系?

我喜欢这节课

300字
主题:学习兴趣、教学方式、记忆困难、师生互动、学科认知

我喜欢这节课

i like this lesson

today, i have the geography class. i am afraid of the geography class, because i have the bad memory and can’t remember the places. but in this class, our teacher does something different, she shows us many pictures and tells us many interesting things about her trips. i listen to her carefully. i like this lesson, it is vivid and i can learn many things about geography.

今天,我有地理课。我害怕地理课,因为我记忆力不好,无法记住地点。但是在这节课上,我们的老师做了点不同的事情,她给我们展示了很多图片,告诉我们很多有关她旅游的趣事。我听得很认真。我很喜欢这节课,是如此的生动,我也学到了有关地理的很多知识。

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这句“她给我们展示了很多图片,告诉我们很多有关她旅游的趣事”真立体画面一下就出来了,连你听讲时眼睛发亮的样子我都看见了。

buy a mobile phone

300字
主题:生活小事、亲子同行、科技依赖、消费选择、日常观察

the screen of my father‘s mobile telephone is broken. when you open the mobile telephone, the screen is always white with light. you can‘t see from the screen. and my father is a businessman. he needed a new one. so my father and i went to the electrical appliance shop. there are many new kinds of mobile telephones. at first, my father chose a sumsung one. but all the telephones have sold out. finally, my father chose a motorola one.

我爸爸的手机屏幕坏了,打开手机,屏幕一是白茫茫的一片,什么也看不到。我爸爸是做生意的,有很多电话。他得买一台新新手机。于是我和爸爸去了电器店。店里有许多新出的手机。起初,爸爸选择了一台三星,但是这个型号的都卖完了。最后,爸爸选择了摩托罗拉。

精选读者点评

句子太碎啦!“the screen is always white with light”这句多美啊,翻译成“白茫茫一片”就丢了光感,试试“亮得发白”?还有“新新手机”是笔误吧哦!