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小学英语作文范文
nobody could live without the sun. the sun gives us light and heat, and light and heat give us life. without the sun, we would be in darkness.
without light or heat, the earth would be very cold and there would be all snow and ice. then all plants and animals would die.
we don see the sun at night, because our earth is always turning round the sun, and only one side of the earth sees the sun.
when we see the sun on the side of the earth, it is day to us.
精选读者点评
太阳真忙啊！你把“转圈圈”写成了“地球绕着太阳转”，还悄悄加了“我们这边看见太阳就是白天”，这句像小朋友踮脚看窗外，多灵！话说回来“nobody could live”后面逗号太急，喘口气再写“the sun gives……”会更顺。
名师·深度剖析
作文类型：说明文、科普小短文
【成语使用】
【形容词】
darkness、cold、all snow and ice
【好词好句】
1. nobody could live without the sun.
2. the sun gives us light and heat, and light and heat give us life.
3. without the sun, we would be in darkness.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "don see"应为"don't see"
【写作亮点】
✓ 逻辑清晰，紧扣太阳与生命的关系层层展开
✓ 句式简洁有力，多用简单句传递核心科学常识
✓ 主题聚焦，始终围绕太阳的作用展开说明
