✎作文范文
i have a good friend.do you know her?let me tell you.shes _u wenjing.shes twelve years old.shes short,but she is thin.she has two big black eyes and a small mouth.she studys in class 1 grade 6 shi yan primary school.we are in the same class.
she has a deskmate.his names chen kangwei.hes a clever boy.hes a new student in our class.his chinese and maths are very well.all the teachers like him very much.
they e very friendly.they never fight.they often learn each other.they are good deskmate.
look!they e my classmates.they zre good deskmate in our class.do you know them now?
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作文类型：记叙文、写人作文
【形容词】
short、thin、big、black、small、clever、friendly、new
【好词好句】
1. she has two big black eyes and a small mouth.
2. they are very friendly. they never fight.
3. they often learn each other.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "shes"应为"she's"
• "studys"应为"studies"
• "names"应为"name's"
• "hes"应为"he's"
• "e"应为"are"
• "zre"应为"are"
• "deskmate"应为"desk mate"（或更规范写作"desk-mate"，但小学阶段常作"desk mate"）
• "learn each other"应为"learn from each other"
【写作亮点】
✓ 以设问开篇，自然引出人物，富有童趣
✓ 抓住外貌特征进行简明描写，符合儿童观察视角
✓ 通过具体行为（从不吵架、互相学习）表现人物关系
✓ 多次使用重复句式强化人物身份与班级归属感
