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小学三年级英语作文范文
my birthday is 14th may.at that day,my mother bought me a big birthday cake and cooked many delicious foods.i invent my friends to my party.after had a meal ,we sang songs and played games.in the afternoon,we went to the park in my dads car.in the evening,my grandfather and grandmother came to my house for dinner,my uncle,aunt and sister came too.my sister gave me a present and then,i went to bed.i had a very happy birthday party.
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作文类型：记叙文、应用文
【成语使用】
【形容词】
big、delicious、happy、many、very
【好词好句】
1. my birthday is 14th may.
2. i invited my friends to my party.
3. we sang songs and played games.
4. i had a very happy birthday party.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "invent"应为"invited"
• "at that day"应为"on that day"
• "after had a meal"应为"after we had a meal"
• "in my dads car"应为"in my dad's car"
• "my sister gave me a present and then,i went to bed."应为"my sister gave me a present, and then i went to bed."
【写作亮点】
✓ 时间线索清晰，按“上午—下午—晚上”自然展开
✓ 动词运用丰富，如bought、cooked、invited、sang、played、went、came、gave等
✓ 人称与视角统一，始终以第一人称叙述亲身经历
✓ 情感表达真挚，“i had a very happy birthday party”收束有力
