✎作文范文
1、my favorite season 我最喜欢的季节
my favorite season is winter. i love it because on that day, the sky will float too many “cotton”, that is snow. it was beautiful, white, and soft. met will melt. one to the winter, i will think of a snowman, snowball fights. it is interesting how ah!
2、mother gave me a toy pig on my tenth birthday. it was very lovely.
妈妈在我十岁生日的时候送给我一只玩具猪猪。非常可爱。
the pig wears a blue dress. her face is pink. her eyes are round and black. her mouth is small and red. her two ears are very big. they seem like two fans.
小猪穿了一条蓝色的裙子。她的脸蛋是粉红色的。她的眼睛圆圆的很黑。她的嘴巴小小的，红红的。她的耳朵很大，看起来像两面扇子。
she looks very happy, because she always smiles. so i think she must be a happy pig.
她看起来很开心，因为她一直挂着笑容。所以我认为她是一只快乐的小猪。
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作文类型：写景作文、状物作文、双语习作
【成语使用】
【形容词】
美丽、洁白、柔软、可爱、粉红、圆圆、黑黑、红红
【好词好句】
1. “the sky will float too many ‘cotton’, that is snow.”
2. “her two ears are very big. they seem like two fans.”
3. “she looks very happy, because she always smiles.”
【修辞手法】
比喻：”they seem like two fans“，将小猪的大耳朵比作扇子，形象生动，突出其夸张的形态特征
【文字校对】
• "met will melt"应为"snow will melt"
• "on that day"应为"in winter"或"during winter"
• "too many ‘cotton’"应为"so much ‘cotton’"或"many ‘cotton balls’"
• "one to the winter"应为"whenever winter comes"
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语自然穿插，体现语言学习的真实语境
✓ 观察细致，从颜色、形状、大小多角度描写玩具猪外形
✓ 拟人手法贯穿始终，“happy pig”“always smiles”赋予物件鲜活情感
✓ 比喻新颖质朴，符合儿童认知特点，“cotton”喻雪、“fans”喻耳，充满童趣
