e-mail

200字
主题:亲情、成长、职业、爱好、家乡、幸福

dear my new panpal zhang yun.

i live in beijing with my mom、dad and my sister .my mother is a teacher.she likes diving. she usually goes to work by her car.she works in a school she teaches science.my father is a policeman.he likes watching tv and taking a trip.he is very strong.my sister and me are student.i like playing football.but my sister doesnot likes palying football.i go to school on foot,but my sister go to school by bike.i have a happy family.

your new panpal.

li pei dong.

精选读者点评

张云同学,你这封信写得真亲切!“我妈妈是老师,喜欢潜水”,老师还潜水?太酷啦!稍显“my sister and me are student”要改成“are students”哦,还有“doesnot likes”中间别漏空格,“palying”也拼错了。多读几遍,小错误就藏不住啦~

寒假记事

750字
主题:成长、信任、规则、幽默、小事件、师生关系

初二年级寒假第一天作文:寒假记事

今天是寒假的第一天,超级“有趣”的一天。

早上起床、写作业、打羽毛球……下午,妈妈送我去上英语课。

一进教室,我就大叫:“诸位,考试成绩如何?”

大家都报出了自己的成绩,不一会儿,三门学科的分、最低分和平均分就都出来了,分别是:语文分:李豆:97,最低分:高婉悦:92.5,平均分:94.5;数学分:高婉悦:100,最低分:耿子钦:95,平均分:97.5;英语分:100,最低分:100,平均分:100。哈!原来我们全班英语成绩都是——100分!!!真是有趣。谁知道,更“有趣”的事情还在后头呢……

下课,我把我的魔尺借给马行远玩儿。他一玩儿不当紧,玩儿上瘾了,央求我放学再还。我答应了。谁知,我这一声“好”,竟惹起了一场轩然大波。

[u:]——[u:] ,[i:]——[i:]……

琪琪正在上面领读,可马行远这边的“咔咔”声却响个不停。那是掰动魔尺的声音。我不停地踢他的板凳,可他却一点儿反应也没有。我都快急死了!teacher正在朝这边走呢!唉……完了完了完了!当这位“天马行空”意识到迎面扑来的阵阵杀机时,为时晚矣。teacher已以迅雷不及掩耳之势将手伸进柜斗里,“嗖”的一声拿了出来,快步走到电视机前把它放到了上面。然后,狠狠地瞪了他一眼。此时,我魔尺的小命就全掌握在teacher的手心里喽!我在后面用拳头在空中使劲挥舞,[如图:(略)]可是,怎么挥也没有用啊。唉,我可怜的魔尺呀……

放学之后,我拉着马行远来到teacher跟前。

我小声说:“teacher,魔尺是我的。”

“哦?”teacher看了我一眼,转过脸对马行远说:“马行远,你说这个魔尺是还给赵佳源呢,还是不还?”

马行远支吾了好半天,才从牙缝里挤出来一个字:“还。”

“如果我把魔尺还给赵佳源的话,那你就欠我一个了。”teacher瞪了一眼马行远,又看了看我。

“……”马行远不知道说什么才好,愣那儿了。我的心也悬了起来,我真害怕teacher会折断魔尺,再把我俩狠狠地批评一顿——那可太可怕了。

幸好,teacher没有那样做。

精选读者点评

哈!“天马行空”“阵阵杀机”“魔尺的小命”,这词儿蹦得呼之欲出,像爆米花噼啪响!然而“teacher”写了六次,咱中文作文里,写“老师”更自然哈?

my favorite subject

150字
主题:兴趣爱好、学科体验、师生关系

mg favorite subject

do you want to know about my favorite subjeci? well, my favorite subject is english. i think its very interesting. i love my engliah teacher. my english teacher is mrs zhang. she is very nice. she is very strict wish us. i like math, too, its difficult, but fun. i don like art. its boring.

this is my favorite subjeci. do you want to tell me about your favorite subject?

精选读者点评

mrs. zhang真严啊!但“strict with us”写成“wish us”可不行,得改,孩子,你心里装着老师呢,错字别挡了这份心意。