✎作文范文
in this winter holiday, i am going to take a trip with my parents by plane.we are going to beijing. then, i am going to go ice skating there. i am going to see the snow. i will play with the snow. i am going to make a snowman with my sister. then we are going to visit the great wall. at last, we are going to go back home by plane.that will be fun in the winter holiday! i can’t wait!
篇六
what a fine day today !i’m very happy in this fine day . beaucse today i don’t have to do my homework and i can play with my good friends .there is lots of snow now ,so we make a sonw man .that’s really intersting .we play with snow to about 6:30 .of couse i must go home now. what a fan day !
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名师·深度剖析
作文类型：记叙文、写景文
【形容词】
fine、happy、lots、really、interesting、fun、fan
【好词好句】
1. what a fine day today!
2. that’s really interesting.
3. what a fan day!
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "beaucse"应为"because"
• "sonw man"应为"snowman"
• "intersting"应为"interesting"
• "fan"应为"fun"
【写作亮点】
✓ 以第一人称真实记录寒假生活，情感自然真挚
✓ 时间线索清晰，用“then”“at last”等连接词推进叙事
✓ 句式以“i am going to…”和“i will…”为主，体现未来时态的初步运用
✓ 多次使用感叹句增强表达感染力
