i love my father very much!

100字
主题:亲情、家庭、成长、日常、热爱、陪伴

i love my father very much!

my father is a teacher. he is thin and tall. he likes eat popcorns. he is handsome! he’s favorite color is black. because he can’t cook. he have many chicken, a dog and many cat. he like listening to music. i like my father.

精选读者点评

标点呢?全篇就一个感叹号撑场面!大小写乱飞,like后面跟动词原形还是to do?popcorns是可数吗?cat为啥不加s?最后一句“i like my father”,前面不是说“love”吗?感情升级了还是降级了?

my teacher英语作文

250字
主题:师生关系、成长感悟、课堂趣事

my teacher英语作文

my english teacher appears very beautiful and she looks about 40 years old.she has a son.our english teacher is very strict with us,and sometimes,she is very friendly and kind to us.she is also humorous.on the april fools day,she said to us,you are going to have a holiday this afternoon.many students thought it true.many students dare not talk,because she is very strict.we are afraid that we cannot pass the e_am,because the teacher will criticise us if we don pass.she doesn give us too much homework,and she doesn give us too much pressure.sometimes,we like our engllish teacher.

i like english,and i like my english teacher.

精选读者点评

开头“very beautiful”太笼统啦!试试写她笑起来眼睛弯弯的样子?或者批作业时推眼镜的小动作?细节才打动人呀~

my cousin stella

200字
主题:亲情、成长、学习、乡情

my cousin stella

i have many cousins. i like stella best. she is a pretty girl. she likes eating cucumbers , eggplants, cabbages… she doesn’t like eating eggs and milk. so she is very short.

stella is an e_cellent student . she is the monitor of her class. she likes studying and she studies very hard. so she is always the top student in her class.

in this summer holiday , i spent a very happy time with her in sichuan . i often miss her very much.

i like my cousin best!

精选读者点评

把stella写得灵动传神!“爱吃黄瓜茄子卷心菜”这句,读着就听见咔嚓咔嚓声~稍显“所以她很矮”这个因果有点急,矮和不吃蛋奶真有关系吗?下回悄悄查查资料?

小学生英语作文 my mother

150字
主题:亲情、母爱、成长、温暖、家庭

小学生英语作文 my mother

look! she is my mother. her name is guo _iaomei. i think this is a nice name. she is with long hair. her eyebrows are like the willows and her eyes are as shining as the sparkler. she is very beautiful. she likes white and red. everything she cooks is very delicious. she also likes watching tv. when i get a fever, she is always with me, taking care of me!

i love my mom! i believe that she love me, too!

精选读者点评

名字拼错了,“guo _iaomei”中间那个下划线是笔误吧?还有“sparkler”一般指手持烟花,形容眼睛不太妥,换成“stars”更自然。话说回来“眉毛像柳叶”这句表达真妙!

我喜爱的老师 my favourite teacher

250字
主题:师生情、学习兴趣、课堂活力

my favourite teacher

hello,my name is steven. i have many good teachers, but my favourite teacher is miss li. swhe is a very good teacher.

she is very young, but her english is very good. she teaches us english every day. her class has so much fun.she sings songs with us, plays games with us. we are so happy . and we learn english well. our english are very very good.so i like her very much.

she likes reading books and playing sports. after class, miss li often plays sports with us. we are very happy. we all love her very much.

this is my favourite teacher.she is a good teacher .i like my english teacher very much. what about you?do you have a good teacher, too?

精选读者点评

句子挺多,但“very very good”“so happy”重复了三次,像在喊口号~试试换两个词?比如“进步飞快”“笑得合不拢嘴”哦!

小学生我的奶奶作文

350字
主题:祖孙情、成长记忆、平凡温暖、乡土生活、隔代陪伴

我的奶奶是一位60多岁的农村老太太,身材有点胖,脸上已经爬满了皱纹,奶奶有二个特点,一是爱吃东西,嘴里整天含着吃的东西,二是爱玩麻将,玩起来,就忘了时间。

不过奶奶最爱我,我小的时候爸、妈工作忙,没有时间照顾我,把我放在了奶奶家里,奶奶为了照顾我,连她最爱玩的麻将也不玩了,整天以我为中心,奶奶还整天说:“干什么也没看孩子重要。”我知道那是因为奶奶喜欢我。

奶奶对我的童年趣事如数家珍,听奶奶说,我小的时候不知影子是什么,看它一直跟着我,我吓得大哭起来,经过奶奶的耐心解释,我才不再害怕影子。奶奶还说,我小的时候不认识动物,奶奶就指着马说:“这是马。”有一次驴拉着车子过来了,我就高兴地指着驴说:“奶奶,奶奶,马,马。”奶奶喜得哈哈大笑。

我爱我的奶奶。

精选读者点评

奶奶含着零食、摸着麻将牌的样子活了!后文“不玩麻将”和前面形成反差,但没点透,她放下的是爱好,捧起的是你呀。

小学生我的哥哥作文

400字
主题:亲情、成长、包容、童真、陪伴

我的哥哥,是一个酷爱音乐舞蹈的人,大概他比较喜欢音乐吧,我也不知道,他从来不告诉我他在学校的发生的事情,对我不是特别好,好了不多说了,请往下看吧!

哥哥上次去秋游带走了我的手机,我还拿了我的宝贝零食给他,他回来的时候什么也没有给我买,还把我的手机玩没电了,真是气死人了,零食也没了,足足有一个小背包那么大,被他吃完了,讨厌!十几块钱的呀!我还舍不得吃啊。我生气极了,找他算账,结果他给了我一个小白虎,要三十五元的,都给我买了。

哥哥什么事情都让着我,上次我和他出去玩,妈妈给了我们一百块哥哥说他保管,我想买棉花糖他给我买了,我说太贵了不用买了,他还是买了,他自己就吃了一点点。

怎么样啊,我的哥哥很不错吧,他在我心里永远是的。我特别喜欢他,他有时打我,有时又对我很好,妈妈他们好像管我管的很严,因为哥哥就是没管严就没考好成绩,所以我必须要让妈妈高兴起来。下次再见吧!

精选读者点评

“小白虎”这个细节明快利落!三十五块钱买个玩具哄生气的妹妹,比写一百句“他爱我”都有力。后文说“有时打我”,和这儿对不上劲儿,是真打?还是闹着玩?下回悄悄补半句,咱就信了。