✎作文范文
yesterday evening, i and my mother gave the teacher a folding of a tulip, a flower and a card.
when sleeping, i in bed tossing and turning sleep also can not sleep, thinking of _ue teacher they received gifts what look like?
this morning, i quickly went to the office of mr. _ue, miss dong and hou teacher to give them a gift. three teachers feel very fond of my gift.
i found that each student is to buy flowers to the teacher, only i a person is a discount to the teacher.
later, i and my mother to do some more, you can give other teachers.
昨天晚上，我和妈妈给老师折了一朵郁金香、一朵太阳花和一张贺卡。
睡觉时，我在床上翻来覆去的睡也睡不着，心里想着薛老师，他们收到礼物的表情什么样？
今天早上，我迅速地跑到薛老师、董老师和侯老师的办公室把礼物给了她们。三个老师都觉得非常喜欢我的礼物。
我发现每个同学都是买的花给老师，只有我一个人是折的花给老师。
以后，我和妈妈多做一些，就可以送给其他老师了。
精选读者点评
名师·深度剖析
作文类型：记叙文、应用文
适合年级：小学三年级、四年级、五年级
【成语使用】
翻来覆去
【形容词】
迅速、喜欢、可爱、特别、其他、更多
【好词好句】
1. 睡觉时，我在床上翻来覆去的睡也睡不着，心里想着薛老师，他们收到礼物的表情什么样？
2. 我发现每个同学都是买的花给老师，只有我一个人是折的花给老师。
3. 以后，我和妈妈多做一些，就可以送给其他老师了。
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "yesterday evening"应为"yesterday evening"
• "i and my mother"应为"my mother and i"
• "a folding of a tulip"应为"a folded tulip"
• "when sleeping, i in bed tossing and turning sleep also can not sleep"应为"when i was sleeping, i tossed and turned and couldn't fall asleep"
• "mr. _ue"应为"mr. xue"
• "three teachers feel very fond of my gift"应为"the three teachers were very fond of my gift"
【写作亮点】
✓ 用生活化语言真实呈现儿童心理活动
✓ 中英文段落对照体现双语表达意识
✓ 通过对比“买花”与“折花”凸显个人特色
✓ 结尾自然延伸，展现持续行动的愿望
