✎作文范文
high-rise buildings in big cities
大城市中发展高层建筑
modernization and urbanization bring both benefitsand problems. in order to solve the problem ofhousing, high- rise buildings have been and arebeing put up in ever greater numbers in more andmore big cities.
high- rise buildings have their advantages and disadvantages, of course. in urban areas whereland is e_pensive, they take up less space. some people say that high-rise buildings can give acity striking beauty. some buildings are apartments, which can hou se hundreds of familiesunder one roof . on the othe r hand , high-rise buildings may be dange rous . what if there is afir e or an ear thquake ? what if power and water ar e in s hor t s upply ? in addition, high-risebuildings/blocks may not be suitable for children and old people.
to conclude, it goes without saying that high- rise building s are necessary, but their numbershould be limited. at the same time, effective measures must be taken to solve suchproblems as the supply of water and power.
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作文类型：议论文、说明文
适合年级：高中一年级、高中二年级、高中三年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
modern、urban、expensive、striking、dangerous
【好词好句】
1. modernization and urbanization bring both benefits and problems.
2. high-rise buildings have their advantages and disadvantages, of course.
3. some buildings are apartments, which can house hundreds of families under one roof.
4. it goes without saying that high-rise buildings are necessary, but their number should be limited.
【修辞手法】
比喻："'striking beauty'将高层建筑的视觉效果比作一种具有冲击力的审美体验"
排比：连续使用“what if…”构成设问式排比，增强语势与思辨感
【文字校对】
• "e_pensive"应为"expensive"
• "hou se"应为"house"
• "othe r"应为"other"
• "fir e"应为"fire"
• "ear thquake"应为"earthquake"
• "in s hor t s upply"应为"in short supply"
• "high- rise building s"应为"high-rise buildings"
【写作亮点】
✓ 观点平衡，兼顾利弊，体现思辨深度
✓ 逻辑清晰，段落功能明确：引出问题—分析正反—总结建议
✓ 句式多样，穿插复合句、条件句与设问句，增强表达张力
✓ 用词准确，如“modernization and urbanization”“under one roof”等短语贴合主题且具书面感
