✎作文范文
大城市中发展高层建筑
high-rise buildings in big cities
modernization and urbaniza tion bring both benefits and problems . in order to solve the problem of housing , high- rise building s have been and a re being put up in ever gr eat er numbers in mor e and more big cities .
high- rise building s have their advantages and disadvantages , of course . in urban areas wher e land is e_pensive , they take up less space . some people say that high- rise buildings can give a city striking beauty . some buildings are apa rt - ments , which can hou se hundreds of families under one roof . on the othe r hand , high-rise buildings may be dange rous . what if there is a fir e or an ear thquake ? what if power and water ar e in s hor t s upply ? in addition , high- rise buildings/ blocks may not be s uitable for childr en and old people .
to conclude , it goes without saying that high- rise building s a re necessa ry , but their number should be limit ed . at the same time, effective measures must be taken to solve such problems as the supply of water and power .
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作文类型：议论文、英语应用文
适合年级：高中三年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
modern、urban、expensive、striking、dangerous、effective
【好词好句】
1. modernization and urbanization bring both benefits and problems.
2. high-rise buildings can give a city striking beauty.
3. some buildings are apartments, which can house hundreds of families under one roof.
4. it goes without saying that high-rise buildings are necessary, but their number should be limited.
【修辞手法】
比喻："'striking beauty'将建筑风貌比作视觉冲击力强的艺术效果，强化形象感"
【文字校对】
• "urbaniza tion"应为"urbanization"
• "high- rise building s"应为"high-rise buildings"
• "e_pensive"应为"expensive"
• "apa rt - ments"应为"apartments"
• "othe r hand"应为"other hand"
• "dange rous"应为"dangerous"
• "fir e"应为"fire"
• "ear thquake"应为"earthquake"
• "in s hor t s upply"应为"in short supply"
• "s uitable"应为"suitable"
• "necessa ry"应为"necessary"
• "limit ed"应为"limited"
【写作亮点】
✓ 观点平衡，兼顾高层建筑的利与弊
✓ 逻辑清晰，采用“现象—分析—结论”结构
✓ 用词准确，如“striking beauty”“in short supply”等搭配自然
✓ 句式多样，包含复合句、条件句与插入语结构