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假设你是李华，你在报上看到北京电视台今年七月将举办外国人“学中文，唱中文歌”才艺大赛。你的美国朋友peter正在北京一所大学学中文，你觉得他应去试一试。请按以下要点给他写信告知此事，并表示可以提供帮助。
比赛时间：7 月18日 。报名时间：截止到6月30日。报名地点：北京电视台
注意：1.词数：100左右 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯 3.参考词汇：才艺大赛—talent show
dear peter,
i read in a newspaper today that a “learn chinese, sing chinese songs” foreigners’ talent show will be held in beijing television station on july 18. i know you like singing, and you are in beijing during that period. i think this is a good chance for you to show your singing talent, and how well you’ve learned chinese. if you would like to try, you u have to go to the tv station to sign up before the end of june. if there is anything i can do for you, i would be more than glad to help.
yours,
li hua
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从整体上说，本文书写得简洁明快。语言简单平实，要点囊括齐全，结构完整。本文的主要特点是让步状语从句的使用，最后两句话，采用了if引导的让步状语从句，结合将来时使用。
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作文类型：应用文、书信
适合年级：高一、高二、高三
【成语使用】
【形容词】
简洁、明快、平实、完整、良好
【好词好句】
1. “i think this is a good chance for you to show your singing talent, and how well you’ve learned chinese.”
2. “if there is anything i can do for you, i would be more than glad to help.”
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "u"应为"you"
• "beijing television station"宜统一为"beijing television station"（专有名词首字母大写）
• "dear peter,"应为"dear peter,"
• "yours,"应为"yours,"
• "li hua"应为"li hua"
【写作亮点】
✓ 要点覆盖全面，时间、地点、截止日期等关键信息清晰准确
✓ 语言自然得体，符合书信语境与中学生表达水平
✓ 句式灵活，合理运用if条件句增强逻辑性与互动感
✓ 行文简洁流畅，词数控制精准，符合题目要求