我的暑假

【导语】小学英语作文范文:我的暑假,中英双语自然对照,体现语言实践意识,以时间顺序清晰展开一日活动,结构明朗。

我的暑假

作文范文

主题: 快乐、家庭、运动、夏日、成长

my summer holiday

i was happy thissummer holiday! do you know why? because i had enjoyed a good summer holiday!in the morning, sometimes i went toyue_iuparkto play badmintonwith my families or friends. we always went to mcdonalds to have lunch afterwe finish the game. my sister and me like swimming, so in the afternoon, wewent to swimming with our father. it was so cool! it feels so great to swim insuch hot summer days.

这个暑假我很开心。你知道为什么吗?因为我度过了一个愉快的暑假!早上,有时候我和家人或者朋友到月秀公园羽毛球。游戏结束后,我们经常去麦当劳吃午餐。我姐姐和我都喜欢游泳,因此,下午我们通常和爸爸去游泳。游泳是如此凉快。在这么炎热的夏天游泳感觉是那么的棒。

精选读者点评

单词拼写要注意哦,“yue_iupark”中间不该有下划线,“mcdonald’s”首字母大写加撇号;“we finish”应为“we finished”,时态要统一!但中英对照部分挺用心,看得出你努力在搭桥。

名师·深度剖析

作文类型:记叙文、双语作文

【成语使用】

【形容词】

愉快、炎热、凉快、棒、开心

【好词好句】

1. it was so cool!

2. it feels so great to swim in such hot summer days.

3. 这个暑假我很开心。你知道为什么吗?因为我度过了一个愉快的暑假!

【修辞手法】

【文字校对】

• "thissummer"应为"this summer"

• "yue_iupark"应为"yuexiu park"

• "families"应为"family"

• "my sister and me"应为"my sister and i"

• "we went to swimming"应为"we went swimming"

• "it feels so great"主谓不一致,应为"it felt so great"

【写作亮点】

✓ 中英双语自然对照,体现语言实践意识

✓ 以时间顺序清晰展开一日活动,结构明朗

✓ 情感表达直率真挚,富有童趣与生活气息

✓ 动词短语丰富(go to play、go to swim、go to have lunch)展现基础语用能力

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