✎作文范文
jims family
吉姆的家庭
小作者的桌上有一张吉姆一家的照片，小作者介绍了照片上的每一个人，以及他们各自的工作。
a picture is on my desk. this is a picture of jims family. the man is jims father. a woman is behind jim. she is his mother. they are teachers. a girl is in the picture, too. she is jims sister. her name is kate green. jim and his sister are in the same school. they are english.
参考翻译
一幅画是我的桌子上。这是吉姆的家人的照片。这名男子是吉姆的父亲。一个女人的背后是吉姆。她是他的母亲。他们是教师。一个女孩是在画面她是上，她是吉姆的妹妹。她的名字是凯特·格林。吉姆和他的姐姐都在同一所学校。他们是英国人
精选读者点评
名师·深度剖析
作文类型：看图写话、家庭介绍、英语习作翻译对照
【成语使用】
【形容词】
same、english、behind、same、same
【好词好句】
1. a picture is on my desk.
2. this is a picture of jim’s family.
3. jim and his sister are in the same school.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "a picture is on my desk"应为"a picture is on my desk."
• "jims father"应为"jim’s father"
• "jims mother"应为"jim’s mother"
• "jims sister"应为"jim’s sister"
• "kate green"应为"kate green"
• "they are english"应为"they are english."
• "a girl is in the picture, too. she is jims sister."应为"a girl is in the picture, too. she is jim’s sister."
• "a woman is behind jim. she is his mother."应为"a woman is behind jim. she is his mother."
【写作亮点】
✓ 结构清晰，按人物顺序逐一介绍
✓ 人称与物主代词使用基本准确
✓ 能运用简单句表达家庭成员关系与身份
✓ 中英文对照呈现，体现双语学习意识
