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i am going to have a busy weekend ! on saturday , im going to clean my room and do homework. then , in the evening , i m going to the supermaket with my mother . on saturday, im going to the bookstore on foot . im going to buy some books. then, im going to go home and read the new books. in the evening , im going to watch tv. that will be fun! what about you? what are you going to do on the weekend?我梦想的工作 my dream job
when i grow up, im going to do what i want to do. im going to move somewhere interesting. paris sounds like a city that i could that enjoy. there are lots of art e_hibitions there. i want to be an artist . so how am i going to do it? first, imgoing to find a part-time job for a year or tow and save some money. then im going to be a student at an art school in paris.
an unforgettable thing in the summer vacation 暑期难忘的一件事
it was a sunny day today,when i got up in the morning,i decided to see my grandparents.so i took the bus and got there at noon,they were happy to see me,and i was very happy,too. in the afternoon,my farther asked me to help him water the plant,and i was happy to see the flowers smiling in the wind. in a word,today is a unforgetive day.because i saw my relatives and helped people.
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作文类型：英语作文、命题作文、记叙文
【成语使用】
【形容词】
sunny、happy、interesting、unforgettable、busy
【好词好句】
1. “paris sounds like a city that i could enjoy.”
2. “i was happy to see the flowers smiling in the wind.”
3. “that will be fun!”
【修辞手法】
比喻：”i was happy to see the flowers smiling in the wind.”，赋予花朵以人的神态，生动展现夏日生机与童趣
【文字校对】
• "supermaket"应为"supermarket"
• "e_hibitions"应为"exhibitions"
• "farther"应为"father"
• "unforgetive"应为"unforgettable"
• "imgoing"应为"i'm going"
• "tow"应为"two"
【写作亮点】
✓ 时态运用基本准确，能较规范使用be going to结构表达未来计划
✓ 场景切换自然，时间线索清晰（saturday / sunday / morning / afternoon）
✓ 情感真挚，通过“flowers smiling”等细节传递温暖亲情与生活趣味
✓ 主题明确，三篇短文分别聚焦周末安排、职业理想、暑期经历，体裁意识初显
