water is the source of life

400字
主题:水与生命、可持续发展、环境保护、科技依存、责任意识

水是生命之源 water is the source of life

water is very important. it is the source of life. everything in the world can’t live without water. the proportion of water and a person’s weight is about 70%. people can live without eating food for three days, but they will be very close to death if they don’t drink water for three days. the same goes for other creature. what’s worse, without water, everything will be stop. we can’t have power, and the world will be in the darkness. the parts of cell phone can’t be made. then we have no way to connect with others. in a word, water is pretty significant. we need to protect it and save it.

水非常重要。它是生命之源。世界上的所有东西都离不开水。人体内的水分和体重的比例大概是70%。人们可以三天不吃食物,却不可以三天不喝水。同理可证,对于其他生物也是一样的。更糟的是,没有水,万物都会停止了。我们无法发电,世界即将陷入黑暗中。手机的零件无法造成。我们就没办法与其他人联系。总之,水是很重要的。我们需要保护它,节约它。

精选读者点评

水是生命之源,这句中英重复得真自然!后半段“手机零件无法造成”有点卡,是想说“制造”吧?顺手改一改,读起来就滑溜多了。

高一简单英语作文-开卷有益

500字
主题:人文精神、终身学习、价值判断、经典力量、青年责任

people often say that gold and silver are the most valuable things in the world. but i don think so.

in my opinion, to read books is more valuable than anything else. the old saying o open a book is always helpful clearly tells us how good it is to read a book. books are our friends. they introduce us different kinds of knowledge. they lead us down the road to success. books are our teachers. they teach us troth, science, literature, and philosophy of life. besides, they increase our knowledge, enlarge our e_perience, strengthen our character and do many other things which we can not do without them. books tell us what is good and what is evil. and only books can tell the good from the bad. therefore to read more books is the best policy for our young students.

人们常说金和银是世界上最有价值的东西。但我不这么认为。

在我看来,读书比其他任何东西都更有价值。俗话说“要开一本书总是很有帮助”,很清楚地告诉我们读一本书有多好。书籍是我们的朋友。他们给我们介绍不同种类的知识。他们带领我们走向成功之路。书籍是我们的老师。他们教我们真理,科学,文学,哲学和生活。此外,他们增加我们的知识,扩大我们的经验,加强我们的性格,做许多其他的事情,我们不能没有他们。书籍告诉我们什么是好,什么是邪恶。只有书本能告诉你的好。因此,阅读更多的书籍是我们年轻学生的政策。

精选读者点评

“要开一本书总是很有帮助”?这句翻译得真有意思,像把古诗硬译成英文腔,然而你敢改俗语,胆子不小!后半段“书籍是朋友/老师”的排比很充满力量,但“加强我们的性格”听着像在给钢条淬火……下次试试“磨亮性子”哦!

我的幸福周未

650字
主题:亲情、劳动、节日、快乐、家庭、成长

my happy weekend

ok, let me tell you something about my weekend.

i am going to do many things and be very busy on the weekend. so i do my homework on saturday morning. in the afternoon, i am going to do housework with my mother. because i am a good girl, i am helpful at home. on sunday morning, i am going to visit my grandparents with my parents. in the afternoon, we are going to the park together. because there is a kite show. and my grandparents likes making kites. i think, we can see many beautiful kites there. and we are going to buy some beautiful kites, too. then, we are going to fly the new kites, that’s fun. in the evening, we are going to have a big dinner. we are going to have fish for dinner. because my grandparents likes eating fish. and my grandma cooks fish well. after dinner, we are going to watch tv together. we are going to be very happy.

this is my happy weekend. i like my weekend very much. what about your weekend? can you tell me?

我快乐的周末

好吧,让我告诉你一些关于我的周末。

我要做很多事情,并在周末很忙。所以我星期六上午做作业。下午,我将和我的母亲做家务。因为我是一个好女孩,我在家很有帮助。星期日上午,我要去看望我的祖父母和我的父母。下午,我们一起去公园。因为有一个风筝秀。我的祖父母喜欢做风筝。我想,我们可以在那里看到许多漂亮的风筝。我们也要买一些漂亮的风筝,太。然后,我们要去放风筝,这很有趣。在晚上,我们要吃一顿丰盛的晚餐。我们将有鱼吃晚饭。因为我的爷爷奶奶喜欢吃鱼。我的奶奶做的鱼很好。晚饭后,我们一起看电视。我们将非常高兴。

这是我快乐的周末。我非常喜欢我的周末。你的周末怎么样?你能告诉我吗?

精选读者点评

这个“风筝秀”真鲜活后文说“买风筝”“放风筝”,可前面只提了“有风筝秀”,没交代谁办的、在哪儿办、啥时候开始,下次悄悄补一句,读者就更信啦!

高一学生英语作文

500字
主题:适应、包容、责任、反思、协作、成长

recently i have just got a job in a water factory and i started to work yesterday. my colleagues were kind and friendly to me. they showed me around the workshop and told me how to use the machines. as yesterday was my first working day, everything seemed so fresh to me. i had a strong eagerness to have a try. because of my curiousness, i did something wrong. i pressed the wrong button and the machines stopped working. suddenly, my face turned red, but luckily, my colleagues didn’t blame me at all. instead, they helped me to deal with the problem. in about half an hour, the machines began to work again. while i still felt sorry for my mistake, so i would be careful before operating the machines ne_t time.

最近,我刚刚找到一份在水厂的工作,我昨天就开始工作了。我的同事对我都很亲切友好。他们带我参观车间,告诉我如何使用机器。因为昨天是我第一天工作,所有的事情对我来说都很新鲜。我强烈的渴望试一试。因为我的好奇,我做错事情了。我按错按钮,机器停止了工作。突然间我的脸变红了,但幸运的是,同事们一点都没有怪我。相反,他们帮我解决了这个问题。大约半小时后,机器又开始运行了。不过我仍因为我的过错而觉得对不起他们,所以我会在下次操作机器的时候更加小心。

精选读者点评

这个“脸突然变红”的细节生动逼真!比写“我很尴尬”强了很多再找找,还有哪些身体反应能代替情绪词?比如手抖、嗓子发紧、后颈发热……

a lazy winter holiday

500字
主题:成长、亲情、冬日、行动、觉醒、生活气息

一个慵懒的寒假a lazy winter holiday

this winter is freezing cold. i didn’t have any desire to go out for play. i always stayed at home. actually, most of the time i was in my bed. when i felt an_ious for staying inside too long, i will go near the window to wach the children building snowman or throwing snowballs. it seemed very interesting. but i just didn’t want to go out. later my mother found that i was so lazy. then she forced me to go out. since my mother said, i have no e_cuse to reject. my mother is right. though the outside was icy, it’s fantastic. everything smells fresh. since then, i went outside everyday, and then did my homework and felt full of energy. the holiday ended very soon. it was a lazy holiday.

今年冬天是寒冷的。我没有要出去玩的欲望。我总是呆在家里。 实际上,大多数时候我是待在床上。由于在室内待的时间过长而感到烦躁时,我会走近窗户看看在外面堆雪人打雪仗的小孩子。看起来非常有趣。但我就是不想出去。后来我妈妈发现我的懒散了。然后她就强迫我出去。因为我妈妈已经开口了,所以我没有理由拒绝。我妈妈是对的。虽然外面是冰冷的,但是感觉非常棒。在外面的一切都是新鲜的。自那时起,我每天都会出去,之后回来做作业,我也觉得充满活力。很快假期就结束了。这是一个慵懒的假期。

精选读者点评

“a_ious”拼错了,是anxious;“wach”应为watch;“e_cuse”少了个x,这些小坑,踩一次就记住了吧。

the importance of keeping promises

600字
主题:诚信、人际信任、行为自律、道德修养、责任意识

遵守的重要性the importance of keeping promises

when we judge a person, we are likely to think about whether he or she is keeping promises, the person who always keeps his promises is popular, people around him are willing to make friends with him. so keeping promises is very important, we should never break our promises, or we will be abandoned by others. first, we should never late for meeting or date. when we make a deal with others to meet at some places, we shall be there in time or earlier, it is rude to be late and let others wait for a long time. i hate my friends late for meeting, though they have reasons, they could have been here in advance. second, we’d better think twice before making a promise, if we promise people, it means we have ability to finish it, people are hold great hope on us, if we fail, how disappoint it is. so we should measure ourselves before we making a promise.

当我们判断一个人的时候,我们倾向于考虑他或者她是否信守,守的人受欢迎,周围的人都喜欢和他做朋友。所以受很重要,我们不要违背我们的诺言,不然会被大家遗弃。第一,我们永远都不要在开会和约会时迟到。当我们和别人相约见面时,应该准时到达或者提前到达,迟到和让别人长时间等待是很无礼的。我不喜欢我的朋友开会迟到,虽然他们有各种理由,但是他们本可以提前到。第二,在许下诺言前我们要三思,如果我们答应了他人,这意味着我们有能力去完成,人们对我们有很大的期望,如果我们失败了,这么失望啊。因此我们在许诺前要衡量自己。

精选读者点评

“守信”这个词在文中反复出现,但没写清“守”什么、“信”在哪,是守时?守诺?守责?建议挑一件小事,比如借橡皮不还、答应帮同学值日却溜了,把“失信”的滋味写实了,比喊口号有力得多。

the best goal

400字
主题:目标管理、自我激励、过程哲学、阶梯思维、教育启示

的目标 the best goal

i remember once upon a time, when i was running 800meters, i felt there seemed to be the impossible mission for me, i wanted to give up, then my teacher told me that i should not think about the 800meters, i should set up 100meters for myself, then i wouldn’t be so tired. i did as he told me, indeed, every time when i finished the small goal, i was happy, in the end, i finished the running. i learn the lesson that we need to set up the best goal, it means we can make the small goals, which are so easy for us to realize. then every time we finish the small goal, we will close to our final destination.

我记得有一次,当我跑800米的时候,我觉得这对于我来说是不可能的任务,我想要放弃,然后我的老师告诉我不应该想着800米,我应该为自己定下100米的目标,这样才不会那么累。我按他说的去做,每次我完成了小目标,我就很开心,最后,我完成了跑步。我学到了东西,我们需要定下的目标,这意味着我们可以定下小目标,对我们来说容易实现。每次我完成了小目标,就会离最终的目的地近了一步。

精选读者点评

这个“100米拆解法”真自然后半段中英文混着来,像你边跑边喘气时脱口而出的话,反而把那种累、停、再咬牙的感觉全带出来了。下次试试把“开心”换成更具体的画面?比如“弯腰扶膝直喘气,却咧嘴笑了”。

on the importance of a name

400字
主题:姓名文化、个人努力、命运自主、价值判断、理性思辨

关于名字的重要性 on the importance of a name

there are always some debates on the importance of a name. some people say the name is vital to a person because it can decide whether a person will be successful or not in the future. furthermore, a positive name can also promote a persons hardworking at study.

对于名字的重要性总是存在一些争论。有人说名字对一个人来说是很重要的,因为它可以决定一个人将来是否会成功。此外,积极的名字也可以促进一个人努力学习。

whereas, some other people hold the opposite opinion that names do not matter. there are strings of reasons. to start with, whether the person is successful or not is up to his own diligence; whats more, they are just names which can be easily changed.

然而,另一些人持相反的意见认为名字并不重要。原因有长长的一串。首先,一个人是否成功是靠他自己的勤奋;更重要的是,它只是名字 ,可以随便改的。

as far as i am concerned, names can not decide any things.

我觉得名字什么都不能决定。

精选读者点评

名字真能决定命运?你这句“名字什么都不能决定”写得干脆利落,像块小石头砸进水里,有声儿,也见底。后面要是能把“为什么不能决定”再掰开揉碎讲两件身边的小事,就更打人了。

上个周未

300字
主题:童年生活、家庭温暖、成长体验、日常乐趣

i had a happy weekend last week.

on saturday morning, i watched tv and helped my mother wash clothes. in the afternoon, i cleaned three bedrooms in my house-- mine, my parents’ and my brother’s.

on sunday, i played football in the park. then i went to my grandparents’ house. grandpa played the piano! the whole family was so happy. later, we wanted to swim. but it was too cold.

this was last weekend.

上周我有一个愉快的周末。

星期六上午,我看了电视,帮妈妈洗衣服。下午,我打扫了三间卧室,我的房子是我的,我的父母和我弟弟的。

星期日,我在公园里踢足球。然后我去了我的爷爷奶奶家。爷爷弹钢琴!全家人都很高兴。后来,我们想游泳。但它太寒冷。

这是上周末。

精选读者点评

句子基本通顺,动词时态和主谓一致有几处小问题,比如“cleaned three bedrooms in my house-- mine, my parents’ and my brother’s”这句破折号用得有点急,后面三个所有格并列,妈妈那句漏了“’s”;还有“it was too cold”想说“天气太冷”,但没点明主语,读着像水突然变冷了……再捋一捋。

plan for english learning

450字
主题:成长意识、学习方法、问题导向、师生协作、坚持实践

英语学习计划 plan for english learning

i’m a middle school student. i love english, but it’s hard for me. now i have a good plan to learn english.

我是一名中学生。我喜欢英语,但是对我来说却很难。现在我有一个很好的英语学习计划。

i have a pronunciation problem. i can’t pronounce so well. so i plan to listen to the tape and read after it. i can’t read english passages quickly and can’t write a passage clearly. now i plan to read more and practice writing often. as for listening, sometimes i can’t understand what others are saying. so i plan to improve myself by listening to the radio and tv. grammar is the most difficult for me. i have no idea of it, but i think my english teacher can help me with it.

我的发音有点问题。我发音不好。所以我打算听磁带并跟读。我不能快速地阅读英语文章,也不能清清楚楚地写文章。现在我计划看多些书,经常练习写作。至于听力,有时候我无法理解其他人在说什么。所以我打算通过听收音机和电视来提高我自己。对我来说语法是最难的。我都不知道怎么办,不过我觉得我的英语老师能够帮助我。

with this english-learning plan, i’m hoping for great progress.

有了这个英语学习计划,我希望能取得很大的进步。

精选读者点评

真敢写!中英混搭不打磕巴,像边想边说,一个认真琢磨的小学高年级生,“i can’t pronounce so well”后面紧接“听磁带跟读”,多当真的主意!可是“清清楚楚地写文章”这说法,咱中文里一般说“写得清楚明白”或“条理清楚”,下次试试?

保持友谊的高一英语作文

300字
主题:情感支持、人际联结、心灵慰藉

保持友谊的高一英语作文

friends areimportant in our life. they are always with us. when we are happy, we feel happy as we are. when we are sad, they try to cheer us up. friendship is our necessity. it’s a warm feeling between you and your friends. this feeling makes you smile all the time. with friendship, your world seems brighter. it lights your life. everyone needs friends and friendship.

朋友在我们的生活中十分重要,他们总是陪伴着我们。当我们快乐的时候,他们同我们一起快乐;当我们伤心的时候,他们想办法逗我们开心。友谊是我们的必需品。你和你朋友之间的感觉很温暖。这种感觉使你一直微笑。有了友谊,你的世界变得更明朗。它点亮了你的生活。每个人都需要朋友和友谊。

精选读者点评

这句“它点熠熠生辉你的生活”写得亮点突出!比前面所有比喻都抓人,像小灯泡突然拧亮点突出,下回试试把全文都照这个光亮写呀!

reading is valuable

500字
主题:阅读意义、人文素养、精神成长、价值判断、终身学习

开卷有益reading is valuable

people often say that gold and silver are the most valuable things in the world. but i don think so.

人们常说金银是世界上最有价值的东西。但是我不这么认为。

in my opinion, to read books is more valuable than anything else. the old saying o open a book is always helpful clearly tells us how good it is to read a book. books are our friends. they introduce us different kinds of knowledge. they lead us down the road to success. books are our teachers. they teach us troth, science, literature, and philosophy of life. besides, they increase our knowledge, enlarge our e_perience, strengthen our character and do many other things which we can not do without them. books tell us what is good and what is evil. and only books can tell the good from the bad. therefore, to read more books is the best policy for our young students.

我认为读书比任何东西都更有价值。古语”开卷有益“清楚的告诉我们读书的好处。书籍是人类的朋友。它们向我们介绍了不同种类的知识,它们引领我们走向成功的道路。书籍是人类的老师。它们教给我们生活的诚实,科学,文学和哲学。此外,它们增长我们的知识,丰富我们的经验,增强我们的特色,而且做了很多没有它们就做不了的事。书籍告诉我们什么是善什么是恶。唯有书本能够辨别好坏。因此,多读书对年轻的学生是的策略。

精选读者点评

“开卷有益”这句用得巧!后文却没见你“开”哪本具体的书,《西游记》里孙悟空翻的筋斗云,和你读《昆虫记》时看到的甲虫翅膀,哪个更让你心头一亮?