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五一前夕——4月28日，我和我的同学去学校附近的公园参加了一次公益劳动。
我们九点钟到公园。分成三个小组后，我们就开始干了起来。每个小组有各自的任务：一组种树、浇花；二组捡拾游人丢弃的果皮纸屑；我们组擦拭了儿童游乐场所有的设施。大家干得都很起劲。
大约十一点半，我们结束了劳动。尽管我们都很累，却很高兴。这一天对于我们大家来说都很有意义，因为我们做了一件好事。
last saturday--april 28th, my classmates and i went to the park near my school. can you guess what we did there?not for amusement but to take part in a volunteer labour.
we reached the park at nine oclock. the whole class was divided into three groups. i was in group three.
each group had different tasks. group one planted trees and watered flowers. group two was told to pick up litter left by the tourists and cleaned all the benches. the group that i was in wiped all the equipment in the childrens playground. all of us worked hard.
before noon we finished working. each of us felt a little bit tired, but we were happy because we had done a good deed.
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作文类型：记叙文、双语作文
适合年级：小学五年级、六年级、初中一年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
起劲、累、高兴、有意义、不同、干净
【好词好句】
1. 五一前夕，4月28日，我和我的同学去学校附近的公园参加了一次公益劳动。
2. 不是为了游玩，而是参加一次志愿劳动。
3. 尽管我们都很累，却很高兴。
4. 因为我们做了一件好事。
【修辞手法】
排比：[“一组种树、浇花；二组捡拾游人丢弃的果皮纸屑；我们组擦拭了儿童游乐场所有的设施”构成任务式并列结构，隐含排比节奏]
【文字校对】
• "last saturday"应为"last saturday"
• "nine oclock"应为"nine o’clock"
• "childrens playground"应为"children’s playground"
• "cleaned all the benches"应为"picked up litter left by the tourists and cleaned all the benches"（逻辑衔接更妥）
【写作亮点】
✓ 时间交代清晰，首句点明背景与事件，开门见山
✓ 中英文自然穿插，体现双语表达意识与生活化语感
✓ 动作描写具体，“种树、浇花”“捡拾”“擦拭”等动词精准有力
✓ 情感收束真挚，“累”与“高兴”的对照凸显劳动价值认同