✎作文范文
hello! i’m summer i like english very much, because of my english teacher, anne today, i would like to introduce her to you.
in my eyes, she’s not a teacher, but a lovely girl and a good friend of mine. she is not tall. she is thin with long hair. her face is round. there are two small eyes on her face. she likes smiling. when she smiles, her eyes just like the moon at the beginning of the month. i think she is very beautiful girl.
she’s very kind, like an old friend. she can singing, dancing and drawing. she can speak very good english. she can tell us many stories and play games with us. when we have an english lesson, we feel very happy. all of us are interested in her lesson.
i have a good teacher. i think i’m very lucky.
译文：
您好!我是夏天。我很喜欢英语，因为我的英语老师，安。今天，我想向大家介绍她给你。
在我眼里，她不是老师，而是一个可爱的女孩和一个好朋友。她个子不高。她是瘦瘦的，有头长头发。她的脸是圆的。有两个小眼睛在她的脸上。她喜欢微笑。当她微笑，她的眼睛就像月亮在月初。我觉得她是很漂亮的女孩。
她很亲切，就像老朋友一样。她能唱歌，跳舞和绘画。她能讲很好的英语。她可以告诉我们很多故事，玩游戏和我们在一起。当我们有一节英语课，我们感到非常高兴。我们所有的人都对她的课感兴趣。
我有一个好老师，我认为我很幸运。
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名师·深度剖析
作文类型：人物描写、记叙文、英语习作翻译对照
适合年级：小学五年级、六年级、初中一年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
可爱的、瘦瘦的、圆的、漂亮的、亲切的、高兴的、幸运的
【好词好句】
1. in my eyes, she’s not a teacher, but a lovely girl and a good friend of mine.
2. when she smiles, her eyes just like the moon at the beginning of the month.
3. she’s very kind, like an old friend.
【修辞手法】
比喻：when she smiles, her eyes just like the moon at the beginning of the month，以初月喻笑眼，清新灵动
【文字校对】
• "can singing"应为"can sing"
• "she is very beautiful girl"应为"she is a very beautiful girl"
• "i’m summer"应为"i’m summer"
• "anne today"应为"anne. today"
• "there are two small eyes on her face"宜改为"she has two small eyes"
【写作亮点】
✓ 视角真挚自然，以儿童口吻展现师生亲昵关系
✓ 比喻新颖质朴，初月之喻契合童心想象
✓ 中英对照呈现双语学习过程，体现跨文化表达意识
✓ 情感层层递进，从外貌到性格再到课堂感受，结构清晰
