childhood memory

【导语】英语作文:childhood memory,以真实童稚视角呈现记忆细节,如“谁落后就为谁加油”,自然流露纯真逻辑,时间线索清晰而富有生活节奏感:周日→第一场→披萨→第二场→冰淇淋→第三场→晨光煎饼。

childhood memory

作文范文

主题: 童年、亲情、怀旧、日常、温暖、成长

have you ever had a flashback of a memory from when you were an infant? or have you ever sat there and wished you were a little kid again? well that happens to me all the time, and even if you don’t remember it probably has happened to you. well i’m going to tell you about a childhood memory that i’ve had.

i remember every sunday i would sit there in the living room and watch football. i was only about 4 years old, and i sat there all day and watched the games. i never knew what was going on, but in someway found it fascinating. after every quarter of play i would request the score. whoever my dad said was behind i would root for. i don’t know why , but i always liked the underdog.

we would always order pizza and wings after the first game ended. i was a little toddler and only ate about 3 wings and a slice of pizza, that was so much i felt like my stomach was about to e_plode. i then had to clean up the mess me and my dad made. i would then go into the living room to watch the end of the second game. we then would always go get ice cream. i always got a chocolate milkshake, my dad got a scoop of vanilla on a sugar cone. i never could drink it all, but i tried. when we were done we would go home for the 3rd game. i made it through the first quarter, and found myself waking up on the couch with the great smell of my grandmother’s pancakes sitting on the kitchen table.

this is one of my favorite childhood memories. can you think of yours? well when you get some time close your eyes and think if you had one chance to relive one memory that you have what would it be? and when you are thinking you will remember things that you never thought you would remember. 你曾经有过一段倒叙的回忆,当你是个婴儿?你有没有坐过那里,希望你是一个小男孩?这一切发生在我的时间,即使你不记得它可能发生在你。我要告诉你我有一个童年的记忆。 我记得每个星期日我都会坐在起居室里看足球比赛。我只有4岁,我整天坐在那里看比赛。我不知道发生了什么,反正觉得很迷人。每季度的比赛后,我会要求得分。我的爸爸说的是我的根。我不知道为什么,但我总喜欢弱者。 在第一场比赛结束后,我们总是为了比萨和翅膀。我是一个小的孩子,只吃了3个翅膀和一片比萨饼,这是这么多我觉得我的胃是要爆炸。然后我不得不把我和我爸爸搞得一团糟。然后我就走进客厅看了第二场比赛的结束。然后,我们总是去吃冰淇淋。我一直有一个巧克力奶昔,我爸爸上了甜筒一勺香草。我从来没有喝过,但我试过。当我们做了,我们会回家的第三场比赛。我第一次做了这一刻,发现自己正躺在沙发上,带着我祖母煎饼的香味坐在厨房的桌子上。 这是我最喜欢的童年回忆。你能想到你的吗?当你得到一些时间闭上眼睛想一想,如果你有一个机会去重温一个记忆,你会是什么?当你在思考时,你会记住一些你从未想过的事情。

精选读者点评

这个“e_plode”真灵动四岁小孩撑得肚子要炸,字都打歪了,反而把那股子憨劲儿全抖出来了。后头“巧克力奶昔喝不完”也尤为真,孩子哪管什么修辞,就记得舔勺子的黏糊劲儿和冰凉甜味儿。

名师·深度剖析

作文类型:记叙文、回忆性散文

适合年级:小学五年级、六年级、初中一年级

【成语使用】

弱者、倒叙、重温

【形容词】

fascinating、little、great、chocolate、vanilla、sugar、favorite、first

【好词好句】

1. “i never knew what was going on, but in someway found it fascinating.”

2. “i felt like my stomach was about to e_plode.”

3. “waking up on the couch with the great smell of my grandmother’s pancakes sitting on the kitchen table.”

【修辞手法】

比喻: “i felt like my stomach was about to e_plode” , 用夸张式比喻表现孩童饱腹后的强烈身体感受

【文字校对】

• "e_plode"应为"explode"

• "you曾经有过一段倒叙的回忆,当你是个婴儿?"应为“你曾经有过一段倒叙式的回忆,关于你还是婴儿的时候?”

• "小男孩"应为"小孩子"或"小孩"

• "根"应为"支持的队伍"

• "翅膀"应为"鸡翅"

【写作亮点】

✓ 以真实童稚视角呈现记忆细节,如“谁落后就为谁加油”,自然流露纯真逻辑

✓ 时间线索清晰而富有生活节奏感:周日→第一场→披萨→第二场→冰淇淋→第三场→晨光煎饼

✓ 中英双语段落形成独特叙事张力,中文部分虽有语病却意外强化了儿童语言转译的真实质感

✓ 感官描写丰盈,“great smell of my grandmother’s pancakes”以嗅觉锚定温情记忆

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