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the new year is coming!now,its the time to make plans for the new year.here is what i will do: 1.i will get better grades.im good at english and chinese, but i need to improve in my math.ill study better! 2.i will break my bad habits.i often get up very very late. to get early is good for my health. so ill get up earlier than usual. 3.i will eat better.ioften eat a lot of junk food. they are not good for my health.i should eat more fruits and vegetables.theu will make my body healthier and stronger. this year was a good year for me,but ican make ne_t year even better.ill work hard to keep my resolutions what are your plans for the new year? whih best wishes for the new year, 新年即将来临,现在我要为新年定下目标 1,我希望能有更好的成绩,我擅长英语和语文,但是我的数学需要提高,我要更加努力学习
2,我希望能够改变坏习惯,我时常赖床,但是早起有利于身体健康,所以我要比平时早起
3,我希望能够吃更好的东西,我经常吃垃圾食品,它们不利于我的健康,我应该多吃水果蔬菜,让我的身体更健康强壮
今年对我来说很好,但我希望明年更好,我将更加努力实现
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作文类型:应用文、记叙文、说明文
适合年级:小学五年级、六年级、初中一年级
【成语使用】
早起晚睡、身体强壮
【形容词】
更好、擅长、健康、强壮、良好、努力、早、晚
【好词好句】
1. “新年即将来临,现在我要为新年定下目标”
2. “我时常赖床,但是早起有利于身体健康”
3. “我应该多吃水果蔬菜,让我的身体更健康强壮”
【修辞手法】
排比:三个“我将……”句式形成节奏清晰的排比结构,增强决心表达力
【文字校对】
• "ne_t"应为"next"
• "whih"应为"with"
• "ican"应为"i can"
• "theu"应为"they"
• "赖床"前漏标点,应为“2,我希望能够改变坏习惯。我时常赖床……”
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语自然穿插,体现语言实践意识
✓ 以数字序号分条陈述,结构清晰、逻辑分明
✓ 目标具体可感,如“早起”“吃水果蔬菜”,具生活真实感
✓ 中英文段落内容基本对应,体现双语表达能力