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一件难忘的事英语作文
few years ago, an unforgettable thing was happened in my life. it is a terrifying e_perience.
the weather was very hot in summer. so my friends and i am together to catch craft. i felt much feared and e_cited. i was frightened for i was first catch craft. if i fall into river how can i do and i isnt good at swimming. i was e_cited that i have a chance to catch craft.
then i was very careful to stand on the craft with scared. but the craft always ups and downs in the river and beyond my control. i was fallen into river after a second i stood on it .i felt very afraid and was difficulty asking for help that i would catch water as soon as i open mouth. at the moment, i thought i would die and say goodbye to all people who i know. i was wet all my clothing and always shivering after my friends help me escaping from river. my heart beat faster than usual as well breath. i absolutely dare not believe that i can see the sun.
when i remind of this matter, i feel i was very lucky. and i think i was a lucky dog.
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作文类型:英语作文、记叙文、成长类作文
适合年级:初中二年级、初中三年级、高中一年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
terrifying、hot、careful、scared、wet、shivering、frightened、excited
【好词好句】
1. it is a terrifying e_perience.
2. i thought i would die and say goodbye to all people who i know.
3. i was wet all my clothing and always shivering after my friends help me escaping from river.
4. i absolutely dare not believe that i can see the sun.
【修辞手法】
比喻:i think i was a lucky dog,以“lucky dog”自喻,口语化中透出劫后余生的庆幸与轻松
【文字校对】
• "was happened"应为"happened"
• "craft"应为"crab"
• "e_cited"应为"excited"
• "e_cited"应为"excited"
• "i am together to catch craft"应为"my friends and i went together to catch crabs"
• "i was fallen into river"应为"i fell into the river"
• "i isnt good at swimming"应为"i'm not good at swimming"
• "i would catch water as soon as i open mouth"应为"i would swallow water as soon as i opened my mouth"
• "remind of"应为"think of"或"recall"
【写作亮点】
✓ 事件脉络清晰,按时间顺序展开惊险过程
✓ 心理描写真实细腻,恐惧与兴奋交织富有感染力
✓ 结尾自然升华,“lucky dog”一语既口语鲜活又暗含感恩意识
✓ 细节生动,“shivering”“heart beat faster”“see the sun”等具身化表达增强临场感