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i am cendy. i am in nanhai e_perimental primary school. i am in class 9, grade 4. i am tall and thin. i live in dali. i have many good friends. i often play with them.
i have many hobbies, riding a bike, drawing pictures and reading books. but i like to read books the best. because of reading books is good for my study. i also like riding bikes. because of it does a lot of good to my body.
what’s your hobby? can you tell me?
我叫cendy。我在南海实验小学4年级9班。我又高又瘦。我住在大理。我有很多好朋友。我经常和他们一起玩。
我有很多爱好,骑自行车,画画和看书。但我最喜欢看书。因为看书对我的学习有好处。我也喜欢骑自行车。因为它对我的身体有好处。
你的爱好是什么?你能告诉我吗?
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作文类型:自我介绍、双语作文
【成语使用】
【形容词】
高、瘦、好、多、大
【好词好句】
1. 我又高又瘦。
2. 我有很多好朋友。
3. 因为看书对我的学习有好处。
【修辞手法】
排比:[“骑自行车,画画和看书”构成并列短语,节奏清晰,略具排比意味]
【文字校对】
• "e_perimental"应为"experimental"
• "what’s your hobby? can you tell me?"标点混用,英文问号后不应加中文标点
• "because of reading books is good for my study"语法错误,应为"because reading books is good for my study"
• "because of it does a lot of good to my body"语法错误,应为"because it does a lot of good for my body"
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语对照,结构清晰,便于理解
✓ 以第一人称自然呈现个人基本信息与兴趣爱好
✓ 句式简明,主谓宾结构稳定,符合初学英语表达习惯
✓ 中文部分语言通顺,用词准确,体现生活化表达特点