✎作文范文
christmas day,the 25th of december,is the biggest festival celebrated in the christian countries of the world.although everyone enjoys christmas day,it is particularly enjoyed by children,who get very e_cited because of the presents they know they are going to receive.small children believe that their presents are brought by santa claus. santa claus (also called father christmas)is a kind of old man who,the children are told,lives at the north pole.he travels through the sky on a sleigh which is pulled by reindeers and loaded with presents.stopping on the roof of houses,he enters by climbing the chimney.when small children go to bed on christmas eve,they hang a stocking at the end of their beds.their parents warn them not to try to look at father christmas,or he will not leave them anything.when they wake,they find their stockings filled with presents.children are very e_cited on christmas morning and always wake up early.
christmas is also a family celebration.as any members of the family as possible.
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名师·深度剖析
作文类型：说明文、节日介绍
适合年级：小学五年级、小学六年级、初中一年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
biggest、small、kind、early、family
【好词好句】
1. christmas day, the 25th of december, is the biggest festival celebrated in the christian countries of the world.
2. santa claus (also called father christmas) is a kind of old man who, the children are told, lives at the north pole.
3. he travels through the sky on a sleigh which is pulled by reindeers and loaded with presents.
【修辞手法】
比喻：将圣诞老人比作“a kind of old man”，以亲切形象强化童话感
【文字校对】
• "e_cited"应为"excited"
• "as any members of the family as possible."语序错误，应为"as many members of the family as possible."
• "reindeers"应为"reindeer"（该词单复数同形）
【写作亮点】
✓ 结构清晰，按“节日概况—儿童视角—家庭意义”自然推进
✓ 时态统一，全篇使用一般现在时，符合说明文规范
✓ 人称转换自然，兼顾客观陈述与儿童视角的生动表达
✓ 细节具体，如“hang a stocking at the end of their beds”富有画面感
