
✎作文范文
upon graduating from the university, every student is faced with a big, practical problem, that is, to make a choice for his/her future career. however, the choice varies from person to person. some students want to find jobs in joint ventures, desiring to earn more money. many are preparing for entering the graduate school, so they work hard to pass the entrance e_amination. also, there are unambitious ones who are indifferent to the choice of career and think that any kind of job will satisfy their desire. only a small number of students are at a loss what to choose. as to me, i am deter mined to further my studies abroad and i am fully supported by my parents.
i have many reasons for my choice. the fundamental one is that in a developed country i can enrich my mind with most advanced professional knowledge in my speciality. i believe that the more i learn, the better equipped i will be with modern knowledge, and the more probably i will succeed in my pursuit. some people suggest that i work while studying. well, that might be a good idea. however, i would like to see more of the world when i am young, and i think three or four years study will undoubtedly benefit my whole life. in addition, i am sure that i will certainly have more opportunities to get a satisfactory job in future with the profound knowledge i learn in graduate school abroad www·
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作文类型:议论文、应用文(留学申请类)
适合年级:高中三年级、大学预科
【成语使用】
无
【形容词】
practical、advanced、modern、satisfactory、profound、developed
【好词好句】
1. "upon graduating from the university, every student is faced with a big, practical problem, that is, to make a choice for his/her future career."
2. "the more i learn, the better equipped i will be with modern knowledge, and the more probably i will succeed in my pursuit."
3. "i would like to see more of the world when i am young"
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "e_amination"应为"examination"
• "deter mined"应为"determined"
• "www·"应为删除
【写作亮点】
✓ 观点清晰,立场明确,贯穿全文的逻辑主线稳定
✓ 句式富于变化,善用复合句与并列结构增强表达力度
✓ 语言简洁务实,兼具理性思辨与个人温度
✓ 用词准确,专业语境下术语使用得当(如"joint ventures""graduate school")