一件幸福的事情

【导语】初三简单英语作文带翻译:一件幸福的事情,事件脉络清晰,按时间顺序展开,情感真挚自然,体现助人之乐。

一件幸福的事情

作文范文

主题: 尊老爱幼、志愿服务、情感体验、责任意识

last saturday my classmates and i went to the old people’s home to help the old people. after we got there , we began to clean the rooms and wash clothes for the old people . we also talk to them. after that we played games with them. the old people were very happy. they laughed and laughed . and they said “thank you” again and again. though we were tired , we were also glad . because we helped other people. i will not forget the happy thing.

上个星期六我和我的同学去了老百姓家去帮助老百姓。我们到了那里,开始打扫房间,给老人洗衣服。我们也对他们说。之后,我们和他们玩游戏。老人们很高兴。他们笑起来,笑起来。他们说:“谢谢你”一次又一次。虽然我们累了,我们也很高兴。因为我们帮助其他人。我不会忘记快乐的事情。

精选读者点评

动词用得跃然纸上!“笑起来,笑起来”比“开怀大笑”还让人看见皱纹里的光。唯独“老百姓家”是不是笔误?老人院和百姓家,差着好大一截呢。

名师·深度剖析

作文类型:记叙文、应用文

适合年级:小学三年级、小学四年级、小学五年级

【成语使用】

笑逐颜开、乐此不疲

【形容词】

高兴、快乐、 tired、glad、old

【好词好句】

1. the old people were very happy. they laughed and laughed.

2. though we were tired , we were also glad . because we helped other people.

3. i will not forget the happy thing.

【修辞手法】

【文字校对】

• "老百姓"应为"老人"

• "我们也对他们说"应为"我们也和他们聊天"

• "笑起来,笑起来"应为"笑个不停"

• "tired"应为"tired"

【写作亮点】

✓ 事件脉络清晰,按时间顺序展开

✓ 情感真挚自然,体现助人之乐

✓ 中英双语对照,展现语言实践意识

✓ 结尾点题,首尾呼应

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