✎作文范文
people help with each other, it is the greatest thing in the world. we should give our love to people who need help.
it was a nice day. a blind person ben walked with a walking stick. when he was walking down the street, a little boy tumbled because of banana skin. maybe there is something wrong with his legs. so the little boy cried sat on the floor. although ben can’t see anything, he walked to the little boy. ben wanted to help the boy. so ben said,” don’t cry. let me help you.” the little boy was very happy. ben carried the little boy on the back. the little boy help ben, too. so they were very happy.
if you see someone needs help, please help him. i’m sure you will be very happy
人们互相帮助，这是世界上最伟大的事情。我们应该把我们的爱给那些需要帮助的人。
这是一个美好的一天。一个盲人本和一根手杖走了。当他在街上散步时，一个小男孩因香蕉皮跌倒了。也许他的腿有点毛病。小男孩哭着坐在地板上。虽然本什么都看不见，他走到小男孩。本想帮助男孩。所以本说，“不要哭。让我来帮你。”小男孩很高兴。本带小男孩在后面。小男孩也帮助本。所以他们很高兴。
如果你看到有人需要帮助，请帮助他。我相信你会很高兴
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名师·深度剖析
作文类型：记叙文、看图写话、双语习作
适合年级：小学三年级、四年级、五年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
美好的、盲人、香蕉皮、高兴、伟大、需要
【好词好句】
1. people help with each other, it is the greatest thing in the world.
2. although ben can’t see anything, he walked to the little boy.
3. 人们互相帮助，这是世界上最伟大的事情。
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "tumbled"应为"fell"
• "ben walked with a walking stick"应为"ben walked with a white cane"
• "the little boy help ben, too"应为"the little boy helped ben, too"
• "ben carried the little boy on the back"应为"ben carried the little boy on his back"
• "a blind person ben"应为"a blind man named ben"
• "maybe there is something wrong with his legs"应为"maybe he hurt his leg"
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语对照呈现，体现跨语言表达意识
✓ 以具体事件支撑抽象主题，叙事脉络清晰
✓ 人物对话自然简洁，符合儿童认知特点
✓ 主题积极向上，传递互助温暖的价值取向