✎作文范文
2026this summer vacation in the past month,this month i and my parents went to vancouver to visit my friends.
we lodged at a friendss house.
arrived in vancouver on the first day,is already in the afternoon, so good friends mother decided to let our two people together to do a dinner .his mother cook the pizza. hanburger, my mother and i do . in addition, the father is responsible for to buy drinks.
my brother and sister are in charge of eating.
after dinner, i and my friends and his younger brother ang sister to the courtyard behind the big swimming pool, especially fun.
well, im waiting for my second days diary.
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作文类型：记叙文、日记
适合年级：小学五年级、小学六年级、初中一年级
【文字校对】
• "2026this"应为"2026年这个"
• "vancouver"应为"vancouver"
• "friendss"应为"friends'"
• "hanburger"应为"hamburger"
• "ang"应为"and"
• "im"应为"i'm"
【写作亮点】
✓ 以真实生活场景为素材，展现跨文化家庭互动的温馨细节
✓ 时间线索清晰，"第一日""第二日"自然勾连日记体结构
✓ 动作分工描写生动，"母亲做饭、父亲买饮、兄弟姐妹负责吃"形成生活化节奏感
✓ 结尾"等待第二天日记"巧妙呼应日记体特征，留有余味
