难忘的一天 a memorable day

450字
主题:劳动教育、集体行动、责任意识、成长体验

it was sunday. our teacher mr zhu led us to a park nearby.usually we go to the park to spend our holiday. but today we went there to take part in voluntary labour.

we got there at nine o clock. mr zhu divided us into three groups and then we began working.

the students in group one planted trees and watered flowers. the studentsin group two were busy collecting litter left by the tourist. they also cleaned the benches in the park. i was in group three. we went to the children s playground and cleaned all the equipment there. we worked very hard.

at about eleven we finished working. we met at the gate of the park. we all felt tired but very happy.

这是星期日。我们的老师朱先生led我们去附近的公园。通常我们去公园度过我们的假期。但是今天我们去那里参加义务劳动。

我们九点到达那里。朱老师把我们分成三组,然后我们开始工作。

学生们在一组种树、浇花。第二组的学生忙着收集垃圾留下的游客。他们还清理了公园的长椅。我是在三组。我们去了儿童游乐场、清洁所有的设备。我们工作很努力。

大约在十一点我们完成的工作。我们在公园门口。我们都感到很累,但很快乐。

精选读者点评

这个“led”功底深厚!后面还藏着个“我们”,主谓宾全齐,比光写“带我们去”有劲多了。再翻翻词典,看看“voluntary labour”能不能换成更活的词?比如“帮公园干活”啊!

a day to remember

400字
主题:劳动教育、集体责任、实践成长、服务意识、校园延伸

劳动任务安排

第一小组:种树、浇花

第二小组:清除游人丢弃的果皮纸屑,清洁座椅

第三小组:擦洗儿童游乐场的设施

it was sunday. our teacher mr zhu led us to a park nearby.usually we go to the park to spend our holiday. but today we went there to take part in voluntary labour.

we got there at nine oclock. mr zhu divided us into three groups and then we began working.

the students in group one planted trees and watered flowers. the students in group two were busy collecting litter left by the tourist. they also cleaned the benches in the park. i was in group three. we went to the childrens playground and cleaned all the equipment there. we worked very hard.

at about eleven we finished working. we met at the gate of the park. we all felt tired but very happy.

注释:

1)lead us to a park nearby把我们带到附近的一个公园

2) take part in voluntary labou:参加义务劳动

3)divide us into three groups把我们分为3个小组

4) left by the tourists游人丢弃的

5) clean all the equipment there擦洗所有的设备

6) at the gate of the park在公园门口

精选读者点评

劳动场景写得挺实,擦滑梯、捡果皮这些动作都看得见摸得着。唯独“we worked very hard”太笼统啦,要是加一句手心磨红了、汗滴进眼睛里,立马就活了!

农耕体验

550字
主题:劳动教育、亲近自然、传统文化、集体协作、成长记忆

农业生态园是一个保护自然的高层次旅游和教育的基地,今天我们乘着春风,坐着大巴来到这里参观。

在我们刚下车时,仿佛对这里有着一个深刻的记忆,我们首先去农耕文化展厅参观,这里展示了很多东西,就像五畜和五谷。五畜分别是:马、牛、羊、猪、狗、鸡,五谷分别是:稻、粟、黍、麦、豆。

随着时间的流逝,我们吃过午饭后就一起去体验石磨。教官将我们进行分组,我们这组有七个人,我们详细分好工,没有一个是闲着。教官叫我们以四十粒米为一勺,然后放到打磨机打磨。于是我们有的同学数米,有的打磨……教官看到我们这样井井有条的开展,最后特殊奖励了粮票给我们这一组,拿到了后我们真开心!

接着我们去溪流捉鱼,先脱好鞋和袜,再挽好裤脚,而后我们就下水捉鱼了。我们在水里捉鱼,捉到大鱼的拿给教官看后就可以换到一市斤粮票。我换到了五市斤粮票,可骄傲了!

体验完溪水,我们去当了回农民,种的是土豆。每组只有一个土豆和铁锹,我们同样是分工合作,最后我做了件她们都不知道的事,我拿铁锹在地上做记号,方便明年来我的时候能够辨认。

最后我们拿粮票去兑换了奖品,还去了超市买仙人掌、紫罗兰、含蓄草等等。

大家感到了黄昏下的余晖,这余晖像是告诉我们:不早了,快回去吧!黄霞红晖之下,大家依依不舍地离开了这块鸟语花香的圣地。

精选读者点评

“五畜”里多写了个“鸡”,课本上明明是“马牛羊猪狗”;“五谷”漏了“麻”,这个知识点得再核对下。客观来说你把石磨分工写得真清楚,连谁数米都记得住,生活观察力不错!

小学五年级叙事英语作文范文

250字
主题:责任意识、集体行动、劳动教育、快乐成长

小学五年级叙事英语作文范文

it was sunday. our teacher mr zhu led us to a park nearby.usually we go to the park to spend our holiday. but today we went there to take part in voluntary labour. we got there at nine oclock. mr zhu divided us into three groups and then we began working. the students in group one planted trees and watered flowers. the studentsin group two were busy collecting litter left by the tourist. they also cleaned the benches in the park. i was in group three. we went to the childrens playground and cleaned all the equipment there. we worked very hard. at about eleven we finished working. we met at the gate of the park. we all felt tired but very happy.

精选读者点评

动词用得有生命力!“planted”“watered”“collected”“cleaned”一串下来,像小扫帚唰唰扫过,画面全出来了。值得注意的是“tourist”要加s哦,游客可不止一个呀!