✎作文范文
my school is called jinling middle school.i like the school very much because the environment of the school is clean and beautiful.the teachers in our school are kind to us,they all hard working.i like the playground best because i can play with my classmates on the playground after school.
我的学校叫金陵中学。我非常喜欢学校，因为学校的环境是干净的，在我们学校美丽的老师对我们很好，他们都努力工作。我喜欢操场上的因为我可以玩我的同学在操场上放学后。
精选读者点评
名师·深度剖析
作文类型：双语作文、写景状物类、校园生活类
适合年级：小学五年级、小学六年级、初中一年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
干净、美丽、可爱、努力、快乐、明亮
【好词好句】
1. my school is called jinling middle school.
2. the environment of the school is clean and beautiful.
3. i like the playground best because i can play with my classmates on the playground after school.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "in our school beautiful teachers"应为"the teachers in our school are beautiful"
• "i like playground上的"应为"i like the playground best"
• "play my classmates"应为"play with my classmates"
• "after school."应为"after school."
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语自然对照，体现语言学习意识
✓ 观察细致，聚焦校园典型场景，操场
✓ 情感真挚，以“喜欢”为线索贯穿全文
✓ 句式简洁清晰，主干明确，符合初学者表达特点
