讨厌的禽流感

【导语】关于h7n9的英语作文:讨厌的禽流感,以鸡的第一人称视角展开叙述,视角新颖,童趣盎然,将禽流感拟作入侵者、大将军,赋予病毒鲜明的形象与行动逻辑。

讨厌的禽流感

作文范文

主题: 疾病防控、人禽关系、生命敬畏、科学认知、责任意识

小朋友,你们好!我是鸡家庭的一个成员。今年,人类都在防禽流感,而禽流感却悄悄的走进我们鸡公民的身体里。

little friends, you are good! i am a member of the family of the chicken. this year, people are against avian influenza, avian influenza has quietly entered our chicken citizen body.

人类本来是很喜欢养我们的,想从前,放眼望去,每家每户都有我们的身影的。可现在,人类都疏远我们了,有一些人还把我们扔进了火炉,残忍地烧死。严重时,人们还成批成批地捕杀我们。尽管我们绝望地哀求,他们还是那么残忍。“哎,要怪只能怪我们鸡家族的公民不好好防禽流感。讨厌的禽流感,你们赶紧离开我们吧!”

human was very much like us, think of the past, look, every household has our shadow. but now, people are alienated us, some people also put us into the stove, brutally. serious when, people also batch to batch to kill us. hey, to blame blame us chicken family citizens not to prevent avian flu. hate the avian flu, you leave us!

记得几年前,禽流感大将军就带着他的士兵一起冲进我们的村子,埋伏在我们村子的边缘。到了晚上,等我们都睡着的时候,禽流感病毒纷纷出动,走进了我们的鼻子和嘴巴。过了一些日子,我们鸡家族的公民都感染病毒了。开始,大家都不以为然,没有及时就诊,就连我们的主人也没把这当回事,不料禽流感竟从我们身上传给了人类。后来,人们就一个个病倒在医院的床上,他们先是胸闷、发烧,然后咳嗽;过了几天,就一个个死了。

i remember a few years ago, the avian flu general of the army took his soldiers rushed into our village, lying in our village edge. in the evening, when we are asleep, avian influenza viruses are deployed, into our nose and mouth. after some days, we chicken family citizens are infected with the virus. begin, everyone not to regard it as right, not timely treatment, even our host also did not take it seriously, but the bird flu from us upload to the human. later, people have a sick in a hospital bed, they first have a fever, chest tightness, and cough; after a few days, a dead.

现在,禽流感的波及面越来越大了:越南、中国、菲律宾… …更让人讨厌的是2026年2月19日,俄国的3万只鸡伙伴竟也死于禽流感,真无奈!

now, spread more and more big bird flu: vietnam, philippines, china...... more people hate is february 19, 2026, the russian 30000 chickens partner had died of bird flu, really helpless!

禽流感,你们是一种令人类、动物都讨厌的病毒,你们就到此收手吧!

avian flu, you are a virus to human, animal are hated, you to just let it go!

精选读者点评

这篇作文真有意思!用小鸡的口吻讲禽流感,想法很非常。第二段中英文混着写,看得出你很想表达,但中文部分更打动人,“每家每户都有我们的身影”,多场景历历在目感啊!下次试试把英文悄悄换成中文吧!

名师·深度剖析

作文类型:童话作文、说明文、书信体

适合年级:小学四年级、五年级、六年级

【成语使用】

成批成批、不以为然

【形容词】

残忍、绝望、讨厌、严重、无奈、悄悄、纷纷

【好词好句】

1. 禽流感大将军就带着他的士兵一起冲进我们的村子,埋伏在我们村子的边缘。

2. 禽流感,你们是一种令人类、动物都讨厌的病毒,你们就到此收手吧!

3. 尽管我们绝望地哀求,他们还是那么残忍。

【修辞手法】

比喻:禽流感大将军就带着他的士兵一起冲进我们的村子,将禽流感拟人化为带兵攻城的将领,增强画面感与危机感

排比:先是胸闷、发烧,然后咳嗽;过了几天,就一个个死了,以时间递进式罗列症状,强化传染过程的紧迫性

【文字校对】

• "鸡公民"应为"鸡类成员"或"鸡家族成员"

• "人类本来是很喜欢养我们的"语序不当,应为"人类本来很喜欢养我们"

• "埋伏在我们村子的边缘"搭配不当,应为"潜伏在我们村子的边缘"

• "upload"应为"spread"

【写作亮点】

✓ 以鸡的第一人称视角展开叙述,视角新颖,童趣盎然

✓ 将禽流感拟作入侵者、大将军,赋予病毒鲜明的形象与行动逻辑

✓ 中英文段落对照呈现,体现跨语言表达尝试与双语意识萌芽

✓ 情感线索清晰:从昔日亲昵→突遭疏离→集体危难→悲愤呼告

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