✎作文范文
self-help traveling enjoys great popularity among college students today. the reason may be that they can save a lot of money by arranging the routes, booking cheaper hotels and deciding cheaper transportation tools all by themselves.
convenient and economical as self-help traveling sounds, they still have some potential problems. perhaps the most important one is the safety problem. being alone without a group or a tour guide, a traveler may be helpless in face of danger, i.e. robbery, wild animal attacks, etc. in addition, they are more likely to be at risk of getting lost when traveling alone in a city strange to them or in the remote countryside.
in my view, self-help traveling can be e_citing and challenging and is worth trying. however, before setting out alone, travelers should make good preparations.besides, they should bear safety and security in mind all the time and keep in touch with their friends or relatives.thus, they can enjoy both safety and pleasure of e_ploring different places.
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作文类型：英语应用文、议论文
适合年级：高中一年级、高中二年级、高中三年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
convenient、economical、important、remote、exciting、challenging
【好词好句】
1. self-help traveling enjoys great popularity among college students today.
2. convenient and economical as self-help traveling sounds, they still have some potential problems.
3. being alone without a group or a tour guide, a traveler may be helpless in face of danger.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "e_citing"应为"exciting"
• "e_ploring"应为"exploring"
• "they"指代不清（前文主语为self-help traveling，后文用they作主语，逻辑不一致）
• "being alone without a group or a tour guide, a traveler may be helpless..."中现在分词短语作状语，主语不一致，宜改为"when traveling alone without a group or a tour guide, a traveler may be helpless..."
【写作亮点】
✓ 观点清晰，结构完整，具备引言—主体—结论的基本框架
✓ 善用让步状语从句（convenient and economical as...）增强语言表现力
✓ 逻辑连接自然，使用perhaps、in addition、however等体现思辨层次
✓ 末段提出具体建议（make good preparations、bear safety in mind、keep in touch），具现实指导性