英国就业率

【导语】12月英语六级满分作文精讲:英国就业率,数据对比清晰,时间节点明确,动词选用准确,如“decline”“increase”“indicate”体现客观描述能力。

英国就业率

作文范文

主题: 经济转型、就业结构、数据变化、职业前瞻、社会趋势

seeding employment in u.k.

作文题目:英国就业率

as can be seen clearly from the graph, the difference in the numbers of people working in thethree major employment sectors in the u.k. economy in the early 1980s was relatively small, with about 4 million workers in engineering, 5 million in agriculture and 5.5 million in theservice industries.

however, the period 1980-1990 saw significant changes in the relative sizes of these threeemployment sectors. there was a rapid decline in employment in agriculture, with the numberof workers dropping by more than 80%. on the other, employment oppor tunities in the serviceindustries increased sharply, especially after 1986, whereas the engineering sectore_perienced a gradual but constant decline.

trends in the above graph clearly indicate that the service industries will continue to employthe largest number of people at least for the ne_t few years, while the engineering sector willneed somewhat fewer workers in the ne_t decade. on the whole, the total number ofemployment offered in these three sectors was much smaller than ten years before and theredoesn seem to be any likelihood for improvement in the near future. so, students who aregoing to graduate soon may need to prepare to seek employment elsewhere.

精选读者点评

这图表描述得挺清楚,数据变化脉络抓得准,尤其“农业下降超80%”“服务业1986年后猛增”这两处,写得干脆利落。但“ne_t”“sectore_perienced”这种拼写错误太扎眼了,考试要扣分的,建议誊抄前先用词典过一遍。

名师·深度剖析

作文类型:图表作文、说明文、英语应用文

适合年级:高中三年级

【成语使用】

【形容词】

significant、rapid、sharp、gradual、constant、largest、smaller、near

【好词好句】

1. as can be seen clearly from the graph, the difference in the numbers of people working in the three major employment sectors in the u.k. economy in the early 1980s was relatively small...

2. the period 1980–1990 saw significant changes in the relative sizes of these three employment sectors.

3. trends in the above graph clearly indicate that the service industries will continue to employ the largest number of people at least for the next few years...

【修辞手法】

【文字校对】

• "seeding"应为"seeing"

• "u.k."应为"u.k."

• "three"前缺少空格,应为"the three"

• "oppor tunities"应为"opportunities"

• "sectore_perienced"应为"sector experienced"

• "ne_t"应为"next"

• "doesn seem"应为"doesn't seem"

【写作亮点】

✓ 数据对比清晰,时间节点明确

✓ 动词选用准确,如“decline”“increase”“indicate”体现客观描述能力

✓ 逻辑连接自然,使用“however”“on the other”“on the whole”等增强段落连贯性

✓ 结尾延伸现实意义,呼应导语中“学生就业准备”的关切

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