✎作文范文
with time past, our summer holiday is nearly over. but i don regret, because i did a lot of significative things during the holiday.
first, i did all of the homework quickly.then the rest of days, i went back to my hometown to visit my relatives. we had a good time there. when i came back to my home, i did some sports every day to make my body healthy, such as football, basketball, swimming, badminton and so on. and i also went to happy valley. i really enjoyed my summer holiday!
though i miss my summer holiday, i am a student. i can forget to study. i will work harder in the new term and have a higher grade.i believe i can do that.
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作文类型：记叙文、抒情文
【成语使用】
【形容词】
significative、good、healthy、happy、higher
【好词好句】
1. "with time past, our summer holiday is nearly over."
2. "we had a good time there."
3. "i really enjoyed my summer holiday!"
【修辞手法】
排比：列举运动项目“football, basketball, swimming, badminton and so on”形成节奏性铺排
【文字校对】
• "i don regret"应为"i do not regret"
• "significative"应为"significant"
• "i can forget to study"应为"i cannot forget to study"
• "have a higher grade"宜改为"achieve higher grades"
【写作亮点】
✓ 选材贴近生活，真实展现假期日常节奏
✓ 段落层次清晰，按时间顺序自然推进
✓ 情感真挚，结尾积极向上，体现成长意识
