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hello! my chinese name is tang jing and my english name is sally.im a happy girl. im 11 years old. march 18th is my birthday.
our school is very nice.im in class 5 ,grade 4.im go to school by bike. i have many teachers. i love them.
i have many habbies.i like swimming,reading and listening to music.my favourite food is rice, my favourite fruit is orange and my favourite colour is red. the dog is my favourite animal.why? because dog are very lovely!
this is me! a happy and lovely girl!
您好我的中文名字叫唐静，我的英文名字叫仙，我是一个快乐的女孩。我11岁。三月十八日是我的生日。
我们学校很好，我在5年级4班，我是骑自行车上学的。我有很多老师。我爱他们。
我有很多的业余爱好。我喜欢游泳，阅读和听音乐最喜欢的食物是米饭，我最喜欢的水果是橘子，我最喜欢的颜色是红色的。狗是我最喜欢的动物。为什么？因为狗非常可爱！
这是我！一个快乐可爱的女孩！
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作文类型：自我介绍、双语作文
【成语使用】
【形容词】
happy、nice、lovely、favourite、red
【好词好句】
1. “i’m a happy girl.”
2. “our school is very nice.”
3. “this is me! a happy and lovely girl!”
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "im"应为"i'm"
• "habbies"应为"hobbies"
• "im go to school"应为"i go to school"
• "dog are very lovely"应为"dogs are very lovely"
• "仙"应为"sally"（中文音译不准确，应为“莎莉”或规范音译）
• "5年级4班"语序错误，应为"四年级五班"
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语自然对照，体现语言学习意识
✓ 人称与语气统一，充满童真与自信感
✓ 信息结构清晰，涵盖年龄、生日、学校、爱好、喜好等核心要素
✓ 结尾呼应开头，形成完整闭环表达
