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i have a pretty rabbit. she wears a white coat. she has long ears.she has two red eyes. my rabbit likes carrots and vegetables. but it doesn’t like taking a bath. she can run and jump. it likes plating and eating. i have a small football and my rabbit likes playing football with me very much.
i like my rabbit. do you like my rabbit?
我有一只漂亮的兔子。她穿着一件白色的外套。她长期以来一直ears.she有红眼睛。我的兔子喜欢吃胡萝卜和蔬菜。但它不喜欢洗澡。她可以奔跑和跳跃。它喜欢电镀和吃。我有一个小足球，我的小兔子也很喜欢和我一起踢足球。 我喜欢我的兔子。你喜欢我的兔子吗？
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名师·深度剖析
作文类型：记叙文、说明文
【形容词】
pretty、white、long、red、small
【好词好句】
1. i have a pretty rabbit.
2. she wears a white coat.
3. my rabbit likes playing football with me very much.
【修辞手法】
比喻：she wears a white coat，将兔子毛色比作穿着白衣，赋予拟人化视觉形象
【文字校对】
• "ears"应为"ears"
• "plating"应为"playing"
• "长期以来一直ears.she有红眼睛"应为"她有长长的耳朵。她有红红的眼睛"
• "电镀"应为"玩耍"
【写作亮点】
✓ 以第一人称展开叙述，亲切自然
✓ 中英双语对照呈现，体现语言学习意识
✓ 动词丰富准确，如run、jump、playing、eating等展现兔子动态特征
✓ 结尾设问引发互动，增强表达感染力