✎作文范文
when i was 4 years old, my mother told me that she was going to have a baby, then i have a sister. at first, i hate my sister, because my mother cares about her all the time, i feel i am ignored. but now, my sister plays with me, i am not lonely any more. she helps me a lot, i love my little sister.
译文：当我四岁的时候，我的妈妈告诉我她准备生小孩子了，然后我就有了妹妹。一开始，我讨厌我的妹妹，因为妈妈总是很关心她，我觉得自己被忽略了。但是现在，我的妹妹和我一起玩，我再也不感到孤单了。她帮了我很多，我爱我的小妹妹。
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作文类型：记叙文、亲情类作文
【形容词】
四岁、小、孤单、讨厌、忽略
【好词好句】
1. “at first, i hate my sister, because my mother cares about her all the time, i feel i am ignored.”
2. “but now, my sister plays with me, i am not lonely any more.”
3. “she helps me a lot, i love my little sister.”
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "hate"应为"hated"
• "i have a sister"应为"i had a sister"
• "cares"应为"was caring"
• "i am ignored"应为"i was ignored"
• "i am not lonely any more"应为"i am no longer lonely"
【写作亮点】
✓ 以真实年龄切入，时间线索清晰自然
✓ 情感变化脉络完整：从“讨厌”到“不孤单”再到“爱”
✓ 中英文对照呈现，体现双语表达意识
✓ 句式简洁，符合儿童口语化叙事特征
