✎作文范文
in the first day of this year, i wake up early in the morning, i am so e_cited that i have a lot of plans. i go out to find my friends, then we go to the street, but there are so many people, we barely to move on. we change our plan, we go to the park, still a lot of people there. the first day is really lively, all the people go out for fun.
在新年的第一天，我早上起得很早，我很兴奋，因为我有很多计划。我走出去找朋友，我们去了街上，但是有很多人，我们几乎无法前进。我们改变了计划，去到公园，仍然有很多人 在那里。第一天确实很热闹，所有的人都出来寻找乐子。
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名师·深度剖析
作文类型：记叙文、双语作文
【成语使用】
人山人海、热闹非凡
【形容词】
兴奋、 lively、热闹、很多、早
【好词好句】
1. “i am so e_cited that i have a lot of plans.”
2. “we barely to move on.”
3. “the first day is really lively, all the people go out for fun.”
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "e_cited"应为"excited"
• "barely to move on"应为"can barely move on"
• "go to the park, still a lot of people there"应为"went to the park, but there were still a lot of people there"
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语对照，体现语言实践意识
✓ 以时间线索清晰展开新年活动场景
✓ 情感真实自然，突出“兴奋”与“热闹”的节日基调
✓ 动作描写连贯，“wake up—go out—find friends—change plan”节奏明快