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迟到的祝福 the late wishes
last week, our school arranged a camping for us, so i went to camping for a two days. on the first day, i had a good time with my classmates, we played some games, we shared our funny life e_perience. when my friend talked about her mom, suddenly, i thought of my mother’s birthday, today was her birthday, i almost forgot about it, i wanted to send her my best wishes, but it was nearly 10 pm, it seemed too late. my friend suggested me to call my mom, she said though it was late, it was better than not to do. so i called my mom, i sent my wishes, she was so happy. i made the right decision.
上周，学校给我们安排了一次露营，因此我去露营两天。在第一天，我和同学们过得很开心，我们玩了很多游戏，并且分享我们有趣的生活经历。当我朋友谈到她母亲的时候，突然，我想到了妈妈的生日，今天是她的生日，我差点就忘记了，我想要给她送上我的祝福，但是时间已经接近晚上十点，已经很晚了。我的朋友建议我给妈妈打个电话，她说虽然迟，但是比不做好。因此我打电话给妈妈，她很开心。我做了正确的决定。
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作文类型：记叙文、双语作文
适合年级：初中二年级、初中三年级、高中一年级
【成语使用】
事不宜迟、为时未晚
【形容词】
开心、有趣、快乐、正确、迟、晚
【好词好句】
1. “though it was late, it was better than not to do”
2. “i made the right decision.”
3. “今天是她的生日，我差点就忘记了”
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "e_perience"应为"experience"
• "a camping"应为"camping"
• "for a two days"应为"for two days"
• "it seemed too late"语境中宜改为"it was already late"
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语自然对照，体现语言实践意识
✓ 时间线索清晰，叙事节奏紧凑
✓ 情感转折真实自然，由“遗忘”到“补救”富有生活温度
✓ 结尾简洁有力，以判断句收束增强思想分量