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my study trip to dunman high school
in july, i was on a study trip to dunman high school. dunman high school is in singapore. it is dongzhou middle school’s sister school. it is a very good school. it is large and there are flowers and trees everywhere. the school looks very nice. there are many teachers and students in the school. they are all friendly and helpful. the students always have classes in english e_cept chinese lessons. they speak english very well, too.
when i was in singapore, i had classes with them, and i was glad to make friends with them. i found my english was very poor, i must study english harder than before. i hope i can talk with my singapore friends in english some day.
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作文类型：记叙文、游记
适合年级：初中一年级、初中二年级
【形容词】
large、friendly、helpful、nice、poor、glad
【好词好句】
1. it is dongzhou middle school’s sister school.
2. the school looks very nice.
3. they are all friendly and helpful.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "e_cept"应为"except"
【写作亮点】
✓ 以时间线索清晰展开行程，结构自然流畅
✓ 通过对比（“my english was very poor”）体现真实成长意识
✓ 用简单句准确传达跨校交流的亲切感与期待感
✓ 主谓一致与基本时态运用整体稳定，符合初学者表达习惯