✎作文范文
how are you?
during summer holiday, i am going to beijing with my parents. can you help me do some thing when i leave home?
i hope you can help me feed my dog by dog s food. i will give you dog s food on that day when i am going to beijing. i also hope you can help me watering the flowers. don t forget give too much water to the flowers.
cheers,
david
你好吗？
暑假期间，我和我的父母去北京。你能帮我吗做某些事，我离开家的时候？
我希望你能帮我喂一下狗的狗的食物。我会给你的狗的那一天的食物时，我要去北京。我也希望你能帮我给花浇水。别忘了给太多水的花朵。
加油，
戴维
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作文类型：应用文、书信
适合年级：小学五年级、小学六年级、初中一年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
暑假、北京、狗的、花朵、太多
【好词好句】
1. during summer holiday, i am going to beijing with my parents.
2. i hope you can help me feed my dog by dog s food.
3. don t forget give too much water to the flowers.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "do some thing"应为"do something"
• "by dog s food"应为"with dog's food"
• "watering the flowers"应为"water the flowers"
• "don t forget give"应为"don't forget to give"
• "give too much water to the flowers"应为"give the flowers too much water"
• "cheers"应为"best wishes"或"yours sincerely"
• "你好吗？"应为"你好！"
• "我能帮你吗做某些事"应为"你能帮我做些事情吗"
• "喂一下狗的狗的食物"应为"用狗粮喂我的狗"
• "给太多水的花朵"应为"给花浇太多水"
【写作亮点】
✓ 书信格式基本完整，包含称呼、正文、署名等要素
✓ 中英文双语对照体现跨文化交际意识
✓ 表达了具体的生活需求，内容真实自然
✓ 有明确的时间（暑假）、地点（北京）、人物（父母、朋友、戴维）和事件（托付照看宠物与植物）