✎作文范文
computer and man
it is believed that the computer is bringing the world into a brand new era. at the time the computer was invented, scientists, marveling at its calculating speed, felt that they had created a miracle. nowadays, the function of the computer is no longer confined to calculation; it permeates people’s daily lives and has become an inseparable part of human society.
people become so heavily dependent on computers that it is hard to imagine the life without computers. therefore, some people are worried that “the real danger is not that the computer will think like man, but man will think like the computer.”
their concern does make sense. indeed, some people spend such a long time working on computers that they have few interactions with people in real life. according to a research, too many hours in front of a computer may lead to a poker face and interpersonal isolation. this fact should arouse our attention, because unlike computers, human beings are social creatures that need emotional connections with others.
yet, it is also unnecessary for us to be overwhelmed by the negative impacts of computers. after all, we humans are intelligent and will be able to figure out better ways to make improvements.
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名师·深度剖析
作文类型：议论文、英语作文
适合年级：高中一年级、高中二年级、高中三年级
【成语使用】
无
【形容词】
brand new、inseparable、heavy、real、social、emotional
【好词好句】
1. “the real danger is not that the computer will think like man, but man will think like the computer.”
2. “human beings are social creatures that need emotional connections with others.”
3. “we humans are intelligent and will be able to figure out better ways to make improvements.”
【修辞手法】
比喻：将人类思维类比为计算机思维，“man will think like the computer”，凸显思维模式异化的隐忧
引用：“the real danger is not that the computer will think like man, but man will think like the computer.”
【文字校对】
• "at the time"应为"at that time"
• "according to a research"应为"according to research"
• "poker face"在此语境中属搭配不当，宜改为"flat affect"或"emotional detachment"；但作为高中生习作，属可接受的表达迁移，不列为硬性错误
【写作亮点】
✓ 观点辩证，既承认技术依赖之忧，又强调人的主体性与能动性
✓ 逻辑清晰，以“现象—担忧—依据—反思—升华”层层推进
✓ 语言准确，学术词汇（permeates、interpersonal isolation、arouse attention）运用得当
✓ 引用警句增强思辨张力，结尾简洁有力