✎作文范文
when i grow up, i want to be an engineer. i want to build a big house and a small house for my father and mother. we will live together.
there will be a garden and playground in front of the house. we will grow beautiful flowers and fruit trees in the garden. we will grow grass in the playground.
i will buy a big car. i will take my father and mother to many places
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名师·深度剖析
作文类型：记叙文、想象作文
适合年级：小学三年级、小学四年级、小学五年级
【形容词】
big、small、beautiful、many
【好词好句】
1. "i want to build a big house and a small house for my father and mother."
2. "there will be a garden and playground in front of the house."
3. "we will grow beautiful flowers and fruit trees in the garden."
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "i will buy a big car. i will take my father and mother to many places"应为"i will buy a big car and take my father and mother to many places."
【写作亮点】
✓ 以第一人称展开真挚朴实的梦想叙述
✓ 空间布局清晰，屋舍、花园、 playground 层次分明
✓ 家庭情感自然流露，体现孝心与温情
✓ 未来时态运用准确，动词结构简洁统一
