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主题：
友谊、童年、分享、快乐
my pen pal
my pen pal lives china.i write to him on friday.his hobbies are the game as mine,collecting stamps and satating day.there are so many games we can play.we can go to parks by bikes.and we can fly beautiful kites!this my pen pal.who is your pen pal?can you tell me?
精选读者点评
标点太“省”啦！句号呢？逗号呢？“china”要大写，“satating day”是不是想写“skating day”？还有，“this my pen pal”少了个is～改完读三遍，耳朵会帮你抓出毛病！
名师·深度剖析
作文类型：书信、记叙文
【文字校对】
• "lives china"应为"lives in china"
• "on friday"应为"on fridays"
• "the game as mine"应为"games as mine"
• "satating day"应为"skating day"
• "by bikes"应为"by bike"
• "this my pen pal"应为"this is my pen pal"
【写作亮点】
✓ 以问答收尾，增强互动感和童趣性
✓ 用"so many games""beautiful kites"等短语展现儿童视角的鲜活体验
✓ 句式简短明快，符合初学英语写作者的语言节奏
✓ 通过"as mine""we can"等表达自然呈现友情与共鸣