✎作文范文
i have a good friend whose name is chen ying_i. she doesn work very well at her study, but she is very willing to help others.
one day, my lunch bo_ disppeared from our class lunch-basket, so i had to look for it in other classes lunch-basket. chen ying_i said, let me go to look for it with you. then we went to the third floor and the fourth floor to look for my lunch bo_. at last, we found it, and sweat covered both of our foreheads. i e_pressed my thanks to her, but she said, don mean it. this is what a friend is all about.
i am very glad to make friends with chen ying_i.
我有一个好朋友，他的名字是陈溪。她学习不好，但她很愿意帮助别人。
有一天，我的午餐盒消失在我们班的午餐篮，所以我不得不在其他班级的午餐篮寻找它。陈溪说，“让我去看你。”然后我们去第三楼，去寻找我的午餐盒第四层。最后，我们发现，与汗水覆盖我的额头。我向她表达了谢意，但她说：“不要说。这是一个朋友的全部。”
我与陈溪交朋友很高兴。
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作文类型：记叙文、双语作文
【成语使用】
【形容词】
good、very、other、third、fourth
【好词好句】
1. "she is very willing to help others."
2. "sweat covered both of our foreheads."
3. "this is what a friend is all about."
【修辞手法】
比喻："'sweat covered both of our foreheads'以具象画面凸显寻物之辛劳，暗喻友情的真诚付出"
【文字校对】
• "chen ying_i"应为"chen xi"
• "don work"应为"doesn't work"
• "bo_"应为"box"
• "disppeared"应为"disappeared"
• "e_pressed"应为"expressed"
• "don mean it"应为"don't mean it"
• "his name is chen xi"应为"her name is chen xi"
• "she learning not good"应为"she doesn't do well in her studies"
• "let me go to look for it with you"应为"let me help you look for it"
• "the third floor and the fourth floor"宜改为"the third and fourth floors"
【写作亮点】
✓ 中英双语对照呈现，体现跨语言表达意识
✓ 通过“找午餐盒”这一生活小事自然展现人物品质
✓ 动作描写与细节刻画结合，如“sweat covered both of our foreheads”增强现场感
✓ 结尾句“this is what a friend is all about”凝练有力，升华主题
