✎作文范文
hello, everyone ! im si yutong !im from guangdong .im a girl and im fourteen years old .im 160 cm tall. my favourite food is apples ,bananas, pears,vegetables, eggs, potatoes and milk ! i don like coke ,ice cream and hamburgers .because they are unhealthy food .my favourite sport is playing tennis and running .i like reading books ,listening to music and collecting stamps.
look ! this is me!
nice to meet you !
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作文类型：自我介绍、英语习作
【成语使用】
【形容词】
favourite、unhealthy、nice
【好词好句】
1. hello, everyone !
2. look ! this is me!
3. nice to meet you !
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "im"应为"i'm"
• "i don like"应为"i don't like"
• "guangdong"应为"guangdong"
• "p e a r s"应为"pears"（范文无空格，此处为误判；实际文本为"pears"，无需修改）
• "vegetables, eggs, potatoes and milk !"中感叹号前多余空格，应为"milk!"
【写作亮点】
✓ 人称与动词搭配准确，体现基本语法意识
✓ 食物与运动分类清晰，逻辑自然
✓ 句式简洁明快，符合口语化自我介绍特征
✓ 结尾富有礼节感，呼应开头问候