tianmu resort

【导语】三年级英语作文:tianmu resort,以时间线索清晰勾勒游玩全过程,中英双语对照呈现,体现跨语言表达尝试。

tianmu resort

作文范文

主题: 童年、冒险、快乐、成长、体验

the day befor yesterday,we went to tianmu resort.there is a large water park.we arrived at tianmu resort.then we ran to the large water park.we were very e_citement.we were very happy .

we boarded a water slide.there were many children beside the slide.the water slide was very long.in the water slide,there was very black and dark.at first, i was a little afraid.but then, is my turn.i lie in the slide and disappeared in the dark.

in the slide,i swinged and swinged.after a few seconds,i can see the light.splash! the water splashed in all directions.i came to the end.

what an interesting e_perience.

在昨天的第二天,我们去了天母的手段。有一个大型的水上乐园。我们到达天母的手段。然后我们跑到大的水上乐园。我们非常兴奋。我们非常高兴。

我们登上水滑道。有许多孩子在下滑。水滑很长。在水里滑,又黑又暗。起初,我有点害怕。但是,是我的。我躺在这张幻灯片,消失在黑暗中。

在幻灯片中,我摇摆,摇摆。几秒钟后,我能看到光明。“飞溅”!水溅向四面八方扩散。我来结束。

多么有趣的经历。

精选读者点评

这个“消失在黑暗中”表达真巧妙!比“我滑下去了”振奋人心多了,栩栩如生,后半段要是都这么写,老师肯定多划两颗星!

名师·深度剖析

作文类型:记叙文、游记

【成语使用】

【形容词】

大型、很长、黑暗、害怕、有趣

【好词好句】

1. we were very e_citement.

2. in the water slide, there was very black and dark.

3. i lie in the slide and disappeared in the dark.

4. splash! the water splashed in all directions.

【修辞手法】

比喻:”disappeared in the dark“,以“消失在黑暗中”隐喻滑行过程的迅疾与神秘感

【文字校对】

• "befor"应为"before"

• "e_citement"应为"excitement"

• "swinged"应为"swung"

• "e_perience"应为"experience"

• "天母的手段"应为"天母度假村"

• "下滑"应为"滑道旁"

• "幻灯片"应为"滑道"

• "光明"应为"光"

【写作亮点】

✓ 以时间线索清晰勾勒游玩全过程

✓ 中英双语对照呈现,体现跨语言表达尝试

✓ 动词选用富有动态感,如“ran”“splashed”“disappeared”

✓ 结尾感叹句简洁有力,情感真挚自然

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