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第29期
a letter for help
dear uncle,
how are you?
ne_t week an english speaking contest will be held in the city. a classmate of mine and i will take part in it on behalf of my school. i am e_cited but also mervous, because it is a good chance to improve my english. but i have no e_perience. although i have been preparing for the contest, i am still not confident. as an e_pert in english, what would you advise me to prepare for the contest?
i plan to pay a visit to you this saturday morning. i wonder whether you will be free then. if not, could you tell me the time that is convenient for you? i am eager to get your instruction. i will appreciate any of your help.
your niece,
yang mei
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作文类型：应用文、书信
适合年级：初中二年级、初中三年级、高中一年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
excited、nervous、good、confident、convenient、eager
【好词好句】
1. "i am excited but also nervous, because it is a good chance to improve my english."
2. "i wonder whether you will be free then."
3. "i am eager to get your instruction."
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "ne_t"应为"net"
• "mervous"应为"nervous"
• "e_perience"应为"experience"
• "e_pert"应为"expert"
• "saturday"应为"saturday"
【写作亮点】
✓ 称谓与落款格式规范，体现书信文体意识
✓ 情感表达自然真实，"excited but also nervous"准确呈现心理状态
✓ 请求帮助的措辞得体，"i wonder whether..."“could you...”体现礼貌与分寸
✓ 时间安排与事由结合紧密，逻辑清晰