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my favorite male actor
i like to watch movie, i had watched many movies, jackie chen is my favorite male actor.
when i was small, i watched jackie chen’s action movie, he can beat many guys at the same time, he is many teenagers’ hero.
in the last ten years, jackie chen has aimed at the foreign market, he took many movies and cooperated with foreign stars, he has achieved great success.
jackie’s success teaches us a lesson, the secret of achieving success is hard work.
jackie got wounded when he shot films, he has many scars on his body.
now he is over 50, but he is going on his playing, we are happy to see jackie chen’s movie.
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作文类型：英语写作、人物描写、记叙文
适合年级：初中一年级、初中二年级、初中三年级
【成语使用】
【形容词】
many、great、happy、small、foreign、hard
【好词好句】
1. he can beat many guys at the same time.
2. jackie’s success teaches us a lesson, the secret of achieving success is hard work.
3. now he is over 50, but he is going on his playing, we are happy to see jackie chen’s movie.
【修辞手法】
【文字校对】
• "i"应为"i"
• "jackie chen"应为"jackie chan"
• "had watched"应为"have watched"
• "he is many teenagers’ hero"应为"he is a hero to many teenagers"
• "took many movies"应为"starred in many movies"
• "going on his playing"应为"continuing his acting career"
【写作亮点】
✓ 人物形象鲜明，突出 jackie chan 的动作明星特质与敬业精神
✓ 时间线索清晰，从童年观影到近年发展自然过渡
✓ 主题明确，以“hard work”点明成功内核，立意积极
✓ 情感真挚，结尾“we are happy to see jackie chen’s movie”流露朴素喜爱